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°°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
Contributed by
OreO
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Sunday, 10th November 2002 @ 06:00:00 PM in AEST
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I called your phone to tell you
Our child's best friend died today
You didn't even answer
One message left, for you to play
So i wrapped her in a blanket
And she shook with such fear
I tried to hold her sweet hand
As she said, i wish daddy was here
I said baby you know he's busy
She said yes i know he is
He works late on every Friday
But all i wanted was his kiss
Our daughter she layed down crying
On the way to the funeral home
She hurt so very badly
She didn't need to be left alone
On the way i passed our favorite Wine Pub
There you stood in jeans and boots
What i saw broke my heart into pieces
I just watched and then i knew
I looked down at our daughter
Who was staring directly at you
You were busy kissing another
I can't beleive your such a fool
She opened up the car door
And she walked right up to you
She said daddy what are you doing?
What happened to i love you?
I walked up and grabbed her shoulder
I said baby let's go home
She said no mommy let me finish
Daddy really needs to be told
The other woman left us all standing
As she cowered out the front door
And you looked so disapointed
That your night now was ruined more
Our daughter said my dear daddy
I needed you so bad today
My best friend died this morning
But now all i want is you to go away
Look what you've done to mommy
You were supposed to be home by now
I'm going to do what you've done to mommy
I'm going to leave you forever, now
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OreO
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2002-11-10 18:00:00]
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by ShadowsCloud on
Sunday, 10th November 2002 @ 06:23:03 PM AEST
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This is very sad, but a good poem. It make me think about my relationship with my father, which is nonexistant.
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by Dance_the_Blades on
Sunday, 10th November 2002 @ 08:54:33 PM AEST
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This is a really sad poem...but it shows your talent...well done!
~*~Dances the Blades~*~
"If I am an Angel Paint me with Black Wings" |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by spaceotter on
Sunday, 10th November 2002 @ 10:17:58 PM AEST
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| Poor girl. Very sad indeed. Great write:) |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by Roshie on
Sunday, 10th November 2002 @ 10:21:49 PM AEST
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| thats beautiful, sad, but beautifully written. |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by LOWMAN613 on
Sunday, 10th November 2002 @ 11:35:34 PM AEST
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Oreo,this was so deep,& very sad for that little girl! Did this really happen? How horrible!
The poem was so touching! Great write! Christina |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by Baby_Blu-XTC on
Monday, 11th November 2002 @ 03:39:42 AM AEST
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| I really enjoyed this 1.Keep up da good work. |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 11th November 2002 @ 08:05:59 AM AEST
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| Very emotional and well written .... how very sad for you both .... but great poem. |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Monday, 11th November 2002 @ 12:28:51 PM AEST
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This is definitely a tear jerker..and so well written...
Jenni |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by POOBEAR on
Tuesday, 12th November 2002 @ 01:15:31 AM AEST
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I had to tell you how much this touched
me and broke my heart. Maybe it reminded
me of my own father but this is really
a great piece of work and I can't imagine
anyone not being touched by this.
very sincerely,
POOBEAR
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by Dot on
Thursday, 14th November 2002 @ 05:12:03 AM AEST
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| How very sad. Beautiful poem. Dot |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by Rakerman1999 on
Friday, 15th November 2002 @ 05:01:16 AM AEST
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| Beautifully sad :o( The talent level just never drops off with you does it? :o)...great write again! |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by Ramfire on
Friday, 15th November 2002 @ 07:32:00 AM AEST
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A sad, sad poem. Really tugs at my heart.
Ramfire |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by viola on
Friday, 15th November 2002 @ 10:25:43 PM AEST
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| Sometimes a daddy is just a donor. This is well written and reminds me that a stepdad can be better than the real thing:) |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by Yellowrose on
Sunday, 17th November 2002 @ 12:04:12 AM AEST
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| What talent. How sad this poem is. A MASTERPIECE painted with words. Yellowrose. |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by darkeyedman on
Monday, 18th November 2002 @ 11:16:53 AM AEST
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| good write |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by DarkerSeason on
Friday, 22nd November 2002 @ 03:06:58 AM AEST
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| Wow, this is amazing. This was a great poem that had incredible imagery and emotion. Keep up the good work. Your talent is endless. |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by TiNyOnE on
Friday, 22nd November 2002 @ 08:10:08 AM AEST
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i love your poetry this is a good write, keep em coming. your such a intelligent writer somethin i wish i grow into. keep up the good work
Tiny |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by TiNyOnE on
Friday, 22nd November 2002 @ 08:10:14 AM AEST
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i love your poetry this is a good write, keep em coming. your such a intelligent writer somethin i wish i grow into. keep up the good work
Tiny |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by TiNyOnE on
Friday, 22nd November 2002 @ 08:11:35 AM AEST
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this poem was very good, keep em coming, your poetry is beyond my level. your so intelliegent to be able to write such good poetry. keep um comin
tiny |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by POETRY_AND_LOVE_BUG on
Sunday, 1st December 2002 @ 05:15:57 PM AEST
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i love that poem it's so real and i can relate to what your saying! thanks for reading my poem too i really liked your comment!
but just to tell you got talent for poetry!!
well done keep writing |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by juves_angel on
Friday, 27th December 2002 @ 01:22:56 PM AEST
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That was a wonderful poem... It makes me think about my own life... I don't know my biological dad, and I have a horrible relationship with the dad I've known all of my life...
-Mandy |
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Re: °°°Daddy I Needed You°°°
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by chantel on
Wednesday, 8th January 2003 @ 02:12:57 PM AEST
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oreo you will never believe this but the exact same thing happened to me 2 years ago my father ran away and my best friend died he was no where around to help me. i wish he was there for me but somtimes things just don't work out the way you want them to i really enjoyed it . now i have to go get a klenex and wipe my tears away
chantel |
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