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High as a Kite
Contributed by
spike
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Friday, 24th September 2004 @ 11:36:19 PM in AEST
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Lifted up into the breeze,
A gust of wind the force of flight
My tail fluttering as you please,
As I swiftly rise towards the light.
I can’t believe I am so high,
Below me the admiring crowds
I gracefully arc across the sky,
My destination is the clouds.
To my left an awesome sight,
Kites of every shape and size
Their colours shimmering in the light,
Diamond, box and delta rise.
Some sing and whistle with each gust,
Some flutter in a gentle tease
A tubular kite as big as a bus,
slowly rolls into the breeze.
And to my right and set apart,
Their strings glistening with powdered glass
The fighters practice their deadly art,
The gaudy kites not in their class.
A dip, a feign, a somersault,
A fluid, barracuda shift
All executed without fault,
Another enemy set adrift.
And at the point of tautest string,
Champing at the tethering twine
All attempts to reel me in,
Only serve to snap the line.
For good or ill I’m now alone,
The sudden freedom, sweet release
A surge of panic, my anchor gone,
Followed by a sense of peace.
I can’t predict how the wind will blow,
The path an unmapped curve of blue
My destination, whose to know,
That takes me further away from you.
Now a pinprick in the sky,
Beyond all hope of any return
A splash of colour bids goodbye,
A wafting kite to parts unknown.
Copyright ©
spike
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2004-09-24 23:36:19]
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Re: High as a Kite
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th September 2004 @ 12:38:03 AM AEST
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To be honest i've had a few experiences like this in my time! (johnny says probably reading more into it!) well rhymed work, with excellent imagery.
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Re: High as a Kite
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 25th September 2004 @ 07:15:40 AM AEST
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| Woah an awesome poem, and described so vividly, it was like being there and seeing thorough your eyes, had to read it again cause the images were so dam real. cool write. |
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Re: High as a Kite
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by SlimStaple on
Sunday, 26th September 2004 @ 09:48:03 AM AEST
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| I think this was very good. A very different look at things. Good words and imagery. I really liked this. |
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Re: High as a Kite
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by Spazzo on
Sunday, 26th September 2004 @ 01:49:57 PM AEST
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| Reading your poem actually made me feel like I was there. Awesome use with words. |
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Re: High as a Kite
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th April 2006 @ 01:51:31 PM AEST
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On a whim I skimmed through to a title that caught my psyche. After reading this I determined this should be your eulogy poem a hundred years from now, hopefully.
A classic display of your genius, brilliance and downright enjoyability! |
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