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Dearest, I'll meet you in the Hollows
Contributed by
eyesxcriedxout1989
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Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 03:53:02 PM in AEST
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Run past the church
Pounding ears, racing heart
To the Hollows
Dearest, I'll meet you there
See your flowing porcelain beauty
So frail, so easily broken
You are safe with me
Breath escapes your blood red lips
As I gently caress your cheek
Our faces, inches aprt
I can feel your breath
On my quivering lips
Yet they stop as soon as our lips meet
Two souls become one, this hallowed night
Three bell tolls tear us apart
We must flee
This love is forbidden
But it cannot be hidden
They are searching for us
And now that we have shared
This loves first kiss
Without a blessing
We will be incinerated
On a crucifix in the center of our village
We must flee
Running through cobwebs and thorn bushes
There is light ahead
We are almost there
As we run by the church
Going towards our cottages
They are gaining on us
You stop suddenly
And whisper gently in my ear
I'd rather die with you
Than live without you
The men are upon us
Chaining us, shackling our soul
They cannot chain my heart
And after my last breath is spent
Know this
Dearest, I'll meet you in the Hollows
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Re: Dearest, I'll meet you in the Hollows
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by MickeyPigKnuckles on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 03:56:51 PM AEST
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| Very creative poem here my friend. I want to thank you for sharing your talents with all of us and hope you keep the ink flowing for us. Great job, MickeyPigKnuckles :o) |
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Re: Dearest, I'll meet you in the Hollows
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 04:29:02 PM AEST
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| i dont get the big ups in this but i thought this was quite amazing actually. very nicely down and written. i liked your ending and how this seemed to shift focus, yet it remained on the same thing. |
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Re: Dearest, I'll meet you in the Hollows
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by Lee on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 09:51:00 PM AEST
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The Surreal eeL y'know Feel says:
Great title, goood imagery, good word usage:
"porcelain"
Well done! |
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Re: Dearest, I'll meet you in the Hollows
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 12:34:39 AM AEST
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| i don't know what it's about but it did remind me of the village, anyway beautiful and compelling write. |
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Re: Dearest, I'll meet you in the Hollows
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by EVERxSOxSWEET on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 05:47:04 PM AEST
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| This really is an amazing write, I love the story it tells...u used such vivid language that i could picture every scene...very good job =] |
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