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magical creation
Contributed by
Hannah_Heaven
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Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 10:57:20 AM in AEST
Topic:
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i can feel your hand inside my head
waving around for some more thoughts
to hunt down and kill my dreams
you were there once
a long time ago
in the mist of paradise
in the spray of the sea
you sat inside my dreams
and your face shined in the night
and gleamed in the day
but now you've faded
and you've decided to hunt me down
and kill the rest of you
inside me
sleeps a part of yourself
so precious and so delicate
and you want to suffocate this life
this unborn miracle holds all my dreams
and you want to kill this?
why,how could you
you have no right
NO RIGHT
its mine
iam nurturing
you are preying on my young
stay away
this life has a right to breathe
the only beautiful thing you have created
you want to destroy
and its here inside me
lays this magic creation...
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Hannah_Heaven
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2004-09-22 10:57:20]
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Re: magical creation
(User Rating: 1 )
by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 11:14:36 AM AEST
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I think this is a really great poem, but other than that...i don't really know what to say about it.
I love this bit..
"i can feel your hand inside my head
waving around for some more thoughts
to hunt down and kill my dreams
you were there once
a long time ago"
But....the whole poem, i have to wonder what it would be like if you split it in three.
Still a great poem,
*hugs*
Phil xxx
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Re: magical creation
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 12:01:06 PM AEST
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An awesome poem very well written with some heart felt feelings witin each word, I like these stanza's best for I felt they made the poem whole:
this life has a right to breathe
the only beautiful thing you have created
you want to destroy
and its here inside me
lays this magic creation...
No-one has the right to destroy life
Take Care Always |
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Re: magical creation
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 12:09:55 PM AEST
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wow this was emotional and very intresitng to sat the least , thnaks for sharing
pixie xx |
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Re: magical creation
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 05:18:12 AM AEST
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