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Karma
Contributed by
Exodus-On-Life
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Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 10:42:55 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Walking away so lonely
The setting sun loses it light to stars
Copper colored karma
And a wet bandage loosely around forever scars
A suttle taste of ocean
The grit and tiny pieces of sand
Inevitably taken in by you
Knocked to the ground, not allowed to stand
Ugly as the sins that bind us
Your beauty will bring me to back in between
It's more than I could ever dream of
It's more than I could have ever seen
Lead me through the darkness
Past the willow and through the dream
Feel the path of loneliness
And it's more than it could have ever seemed
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Re: Karma
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by Sirena_Degana on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 10:49:34 AM AEST
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gorgoeus
blessed be
sirena |
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Re: Karma
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by reprobate on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 10:55:47 AM AEST
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sounds of self-abuse and lonely...i like it!
thanks for sharing |
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Re: Karma
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 11:19:08 AM AEST
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I love this bit
Walking away so lonely
The setting sun loses it light to stars
Copper colored karma
And a wet bandage loosely around forever scars
I think the second line is very beautiful.
Nothing i could really point out that i didn't like.
Great write,
Phil xxx |
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Re: Karma
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 12:12:02 PM AEST
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| Awesoem poem, so full of unleashed emotions, and portrayed so vividly, well done and thank you for sharing such awesome talant. |
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Re: Karma
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 05:09:19 AM AEST
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| awesome,i love it |
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