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You win
Contributed by
purplestary
on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 08:51:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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don't cut me any deeper
stitches already will not work
the blood just seeps all over
everything white, now red
don't tear my heart again
a million peices already scattered
the red slivers lie all over
every floor now stained
don't stab me anymore
the pain i cannot bare
the knife has had enough
even the handle is now soaked
i can't take it anymore
this love will never last
you cannot hold onto the one
you've hated all along
this is not about a guy
this is not about lost loves
this is all about myself
because myself will not let go
myself won't let me be
she screams and knocks me down
she won't let me know joy
and all she knows is hurt
she loves to cause my pain
she dances when i cry
she laughs aloud for all to hear
when i'm ready and willing to die
now there's only one way out
one way to abandon the strife
i must die and let her live
for she'll never give herself up
so as i take my one last breath
i'll say a few more words:
farewell to all
and noone cry
for i will be set free
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Re: You win
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 09:21:59 AM AEST
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| A sad write, such vivid emotions, a sound rythem to the poem, all in all a good write, |
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Re: You win
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 09:59:59 AM AEST
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This feeling is so individual and universal at the same time. It is the struggle between the spiritual and the sinful. It is epic and it is minute. You have described it well.
Stitch |
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Re: You win
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by Sirena_Degana on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 10:24:53 AM AEST
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very unique..great write....i feel the pain in this....so unruly.
blessed be
sirena |
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Re: You win
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 11:50:30 AM AEST
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It's all so true...you can be your own worst enemy sometimes, I know I can.
Such a sad write, But please don't do anything, ok?
You have described how it feels very well.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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