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Autumn
Contributed by
Hurretje
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Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 02:59:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
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When the yellow dress of Summer
Is replaced by Autumn's raincoat
It's the rolling rhythm of a drummer
On whose beat the colored leaves float
They're like dancers, from left to right
In their head kewl mega dope bytes
See their feet move, sleek and spicy
Empty, their eyes, cold and icy
These crowds don't see their hissing foe
Filling their blind minds with its woe
With cold and dark and emptiness
With crop shorted souls, raw distress
Until they're down in Autumn's soil
And wake, so drenched in Autumn's coil
Their dreamy hopes burked in the clouds
Their petty lifes covered with shrouds
That's Autumn who turns green tops red
The sly fall that turns good moods bad
Its prime sprouts colors on our way
That soon will fly, dissolve in grey
Gone with the birds, they're all due south
The bare land left with open mouth
That breathes in rain and storm and chill
That's when we bend for Autumn's will
Copyright ©
Hurretje
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Re: Autumn
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 03:05:26 AM AEST
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Very beautifully written.
One can see it-n-all it's collers from reading this masterpeice of beauty.
Great job.
luv, huggs, smiles, autumn,
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Re: Autumn
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by WinterFawn on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 05:31:37 AM AEST
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Love the descriptions in this verse. Great imagery. Beautiful!
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Re: Autumn
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 06:14:34 AM AEST
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Woah loved the rythem in this poem, it was like balad being sung welcoming the change.
So vivd in stylings and colors the shouted.
Awesome write. |
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Re: Autumn
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 07:27:52 AM AEST
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Quite a write. I tend to LOVE this time of year. Makes me think of Ray Bradbury's The October Country. Very well done as always, my friend.
Stitch |
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Re: Autumn
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 10:14:33 AM AEST
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Autumn is my favorite season of the year. This is my favorite poem about it so far. Mother Nature does her most beautiful work in these months. I am gloriously happy in autumn. Beautiful imagery and flow.
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Re: Autumn
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by Sirena_Degana on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 10:36:56 AM AEST
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very creative..very alive. and graceful
blessed be
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Re: Autumn
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 11:59:32 AM AEST
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I adore the Autumn!! This is a great poem Hur, Some amazing images here.
This poem reminds me of stomping through piles of crisp brown red leaves with gloves and a scarf on.
Amazing write.
Much love,
Phil xxx
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Re: Autumn
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by venkat on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 07:41:11 AM AEST
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| superb..very beautiful;. venkat |
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Re: Autumn
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 11:03:21 PM AEST
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truely beautiful:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Autumn
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by SlimStaple on
Saturday, 25th September 2004 @ 12:01:01 PM AEST
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| Nice...but I LOVE AUTUMN! It's my favorite time of the year...I hate summer. It's hot... |
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Re: Autumn
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 09:25:58 PM AEST
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BRAVO, AND ANOTHER BRAVO!!!! This poem is so exceptional......I've written about the Autumn, and read everyone else's poem about her too.............but you are the utimate my friend!!!!What a wonderful way of explaining her in all of her Awe! BRAVO again my friend....I shall never forget this poem.........no matter how far I roam!
You've done a great job Autumn would certainly be proud!!!
Poetic hugs and dancing feet
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Re: Autumn
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by Cynthia on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 07:09:18 PM AEST
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| Hur, this was such a wonderful read. Keep penning. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Autumn
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by inoc on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 08:05:38 AM AEST
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oh....how brilliant Hurretje
you do write so well
cheers!~ |
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Re: Autumn
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 04:28:50 PM AEST
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The personification as excellent. It made me view this wondrous season (the best one of them all) in a new point of view. Graceful piece here...
~Carrie~ |
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