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Serpent
Contributed by
ShadowsCloud
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Saturday, 9th November 2002 @ 11:00:00 AM in AEST
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Evil-eyed serpent
compelling me with your gaze.
Wrapped around me
with surreptitious intent.
Give me your forked tongue
and I'll give you mine.
Hypnotic slitted eyes
drawing me closer
to divine seduction.
Little deaths, they call them.
You feel all powerful
as you enfold me in your coils,
but beware...
I bite.
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ShadowsCloud
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2002-11-09 11:00:00]
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Re: Serpent
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by OreO on
Saturday, 9th November 2002 @ 11:03:49 AM AEST
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You tell em' how it is lol
This was a great write
i enjoyed reading this one
Keep em' coming
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::.
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Re: Serpent
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by frozensuicide on
Saturday, 16th November 2002 @ 10:15:35 AM AEST
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| hm, this is intresting! a bit short ,but pretty good. |
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Re: Serpent
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 08:54:41 AM AEST
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Oh do you now Candice,
I must admit I had to look up 'surreptitious' in my dictionary, this helped me get it when I read it the second time.
But that was only due to my own ignorance!
It's a very seductive write, which kinda lures you in then Arrgghh!! Well written.
With love
Dean:-) |
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Re: Serpent
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by ShadowsCloud on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 09:04:18 AM AEST
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Dean, don't feel bad about know what 'surreptitous' means. A lot of my friends didn't know either. The problem isn't you it is me. I have a very excessive vocabular. And I tend to use a lot of big words. But I am glad that once you understood you liked it. Oh, I only bite if I am asked to. Thanks for you comment. I'm really glad that you liked it.
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Re: Serpent
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 09:13:31 AM AEST
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Candice why do you see your knowing lots of good words, which help you understand how to communicate better, as being your problem?
An educated mind is a huge turn-on in my culture, yours can't be that much different surely!!
With love
Dean;-) |
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Re: Serpent
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by ShadowsCloud on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 09:30:36 AM AEST
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I don't really see the fact that I know a lot of words as my problem, what is actually my problem is that I can constantly correcting people. My friend get kind mad at me for that, but I can't help it.
Unfortunately my culture is different. Some times I think that guys hear don't even think we have minds. With them it is all about the superficual outward appearence. And that is just wrong. They really should care that we have a brain in our heads. I admit I like outward appearences a much as the next girl, but at least I also look for what is on the inside. Outward appearences are SO superfical, and deceiving. Let me put it this way, the guy that my poems "He Beat Me" and "I Said No" were about was a really good looking man, but on the inside he was as ugly as they come. My culture should be more like yours. I hope that answered your question.
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Re: Serpent
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 09:42:22 AM AEST
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Yes it did, thankyou Candice.
Beauty is often only skin deep!
My ex was/is very pretty, but she does posess beauty inside as well, she was just often affraid of showing it properly, I guess she did have her reasons though, like everybody does!
With love
Dean:-) |
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Re: Serpent
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by ShadowsCloud on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 09:47:51 AM AEST
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Dean, I think that the world would be a much better place if everyone was beautiful inside. That's really all that matters.
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