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I Want It To Be Like Tonight
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 01:39:04 AM in AEST
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I want to be hopeless and helpless
I want to be distraught without you
I want you to be everything to me
- I want to be nothing without you -
I want to curl up next you in the dark
To be too scared to be alone at night
I want to exist in the shadow you cast
- I want to be dark without your light -
I want to be completely overcome by you
I don’t want to be strong on my own
I want to be real and true if only for you
- I want to be terrified when I'm alone -
I want you to remind me how to need
I want you to care for me endlessly
I want to rid myself of what I’ve learned
- I want you to tell me how it should be -
I want my heart to beat along with yours
To feel like it couldn’t survive without you
I want to breathe the air you supply
- I want to feel like I’d die without you -
I want you to take me in your arms
Tell me that you’ll make everything right
I want you to always be the strong one
- I want it to be like it is tonight -
Tonight…
I want, I need, you.
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by holderofthestone on
Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 02:20:48 AM AEST
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wow... this piece screams out to me. many lines in this poem relate to somethings im going through....
I want you to tell me how it should be- this one in paticualr. another amazingly emotional write from you silent. I always love to read what your heart has to say. A+++++
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by WinterFawn on
Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 04:10:27 AM AEST
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To open ourselves up and be vulnerable to someone is a scary but very beautiful feeling. I absolutely love how you wrote this piece!
"I want you to take me in your arms
Tell me that you’ll make everything right
I want you to always be the strong one"
This is the heart of the poem for me......
Excellent!
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 08:17:23 AM AEST
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I enjoyed and loved reading this poem. It was so well composed, clearly expressed and packed with emotion.
We all need someone to be strong for us at times. But being strong within yourself is a blessing as well. The right combination makes for greatness and healthy relationships.
Very well done on this one...
Kie |
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 11:21:20 AM AEST
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awwwww this write spoke loudly to me, it was expressed greatly and flow was wonderful,
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 12:43:55 PM AEST
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To fall into a person so completely and have them hold you, protect you, care for you completely and selflessly...to trust them utterly is a form of love and nothing less.
Your write eminates this to a tee.
Beautiful job!! |
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by ShadowDaughter on
Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 07:53:36 PM AEST
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Ohhhh . . . SNM . . . I'm so glad you *did* post it, then. This is beautiful, in a raw pure strong way that the rest of your poems --while utter pearls, don't get me wrong-- are not. I love this for its sheer purity of emotion . . . errr . . . whatever the word is . . . just that feeling pinned to paper (screen e_e) so very well.
Great, wonderful, beautiful job, and the message is one I --and everyone else, I'm sure-- can identify with all too well. I love this poem to pieces.
bunches of hugginess,
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 08:48:30 AM AEST
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The universal longing. I think this is especially true of women. We hate having to be strong. Oh, we do it, and we're proud of being able to, but we really just want our father to hold us and take care of us. I've written about this so many times. It's a feeling I wish would go away, and yet I cling to it as for dear life. Good write, obviously.
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by DreamWeaver on
Sunday, 26th September 2004 @ 03:27:48 AM AEST
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| Oh my! ... I'm so glad I read this poem tonight. Sometimes you read something that expresses everything you wanted to say ... I also feel so tired of being strong, and want so badly to be taken care of ... that would be bliss, but alas we have to keep plodding on for there are so many who rely on us. Well, I just wanted to say that this touched me deeply, and thank you for sharing it ... hugs Jan |
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by BrandySwanson on
Sunday, 26th September 2004 @ 11:46:44 AM AEST
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beautifully written silent. Loved it
Brandy |
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by SocialMisfit on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 01:03:09 AM AEST
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i am at a hard decisioon here....stop reading over and over and comment or continue on reading, guess we al know what i picked :D...anyhow im geting off subject thats frigin awsome, as in the mona lisa is an awsome painting awsome this is utterly fantastic i love it....again i give another awsome........
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by Flipped_out on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 08:13:37 AM AEST
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I have read and re read this...and probably will keep reading this poem
SNM this is stunningly good..and deep from the bottom of your boots moving
that wow..passion..amazing love you portray this just beautifully
Thankyou so much for this
Kelly x |
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by theMoth on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 01:55:28 PM AEST
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Wow.
This was awesome.
You are on full power, SNM.
--Mothy |
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd October 2004 @ 02:19:50 AM AEST
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another winner i could feel
the yearning from this side of
the pond. Beautifully written.
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by outsider on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 03:23:20 AM AEST
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What a write this is and what feeling within it. Im glad I got to read this poem.
"I want to be dark without your light " That was the best line for me |
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Re: I Want It To Be Like Tonight
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th May 2006 @ 02:04:59 AM AEST
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Wow!!!!!! I'm thinking this is the best love poem I have ever read!
Timber
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