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Inhale the Sky
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 12:53:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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I will
breathe and know
I'm inhaling the sky; I will
kiss clouds with my words
and
love the words for being mine
I will
understand the moon and
become a grain of sand
on the beach
and succumb to salt-water; I will
comb the tattered yesterdays
from my salt-streaked hair
I will
know better than to whisper;
I will
smile in the mirror
and be glad to see it's me.
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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2004-09-19 00:53:12]
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by inoc on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 01:40:09 AM AEST
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I thought this poem bought the nature into us to help us strive for the future tomorrows!
I enjoyed your words ShadowDaughter
cheers! |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by venkat on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 01:52:17 AM AEST
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| lovely..venkat |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 02:49:42 AM AEST
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Really beautiful, an understanding of the nature that lies dormant in the majority of us.
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 06:52:42 AM AEST
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" I will" have to tell you that this is so very beautiful.
Very well done
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 07:09:48 AM AEST
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Wow girl.
Is there a poem of yours i do not like? I think not.
I love it.
And, though it used the same words, it doesn't sound repetetive.
I love the way you describe...
This part caught me
"I will
understand the moon and
become a grain of sand
on the beach
and succumb to salt-water; I will
comb the tattered yesterdays
from my salt-streaked hair"
I had a great image of you combing yesterdays out of your hair...
Great write hunni.
Phil xxx |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 07:11:09 AM AEST
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It is an excellent outlook on life itself. Setting and meeting goals is an extremely important aspect of life. Without goals (dreams if you wish) we would just flounder in the sea of uncertainty. Seems at your young age you have already realized that, old soul.
Much love,
Rita |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 09:20:09 AM AEST
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nora, truely beautiful, love the light gentle style you have here, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by ZooYork_Chick on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 11:57:32 AM AEST
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| i dont really no what to say in comments, ive only just started reading other peoples work. i dont write poetry i think its just thoughts when i do, but this is a work of art. i really enjoyed it-it offers something new. |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 04:15:47 PM AEST
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Oh, I like this so much. This is so liberating ...so empowering...so self-actualized. Just what I needed to read right now. Bravo!
Stitch |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by MoonlitAngel on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 04:16:11 PM AEST
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Aww, Nora... yw. Not that I did much. lol. I truly love this poem, it's been a long time since I was actually touched by something so optimistic and positive. Usually I just scrunch up my nose and say "ick". lol. But this is really beautiful, and so "you". I love it. :)
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 09:05:43 PM AEST
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Very vivid and poetic! This reminds me of the ancient Celtic poetry of Taliesin. Excellent piece.
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by SocialMisfit on
Monday, 20th September 2004 @ 09:31:32 PM AEST
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a very good poem........has a nice flow and just all and all an enjoyable read.
SM
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 12:14:18 AM AEST
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This is so..... wonderfully you. Incredibly wise, strong, insightful... touching. It is, as it always is from you, so very much more than the words on the page. I envy your clarity, Nora - I truly do. You are (and ever will be) wise beyond your years.
I am sort of intrigued by the revision. (I was here previously and hadn't the time to comment.) I understood, and somehow miss, the prior ending of "(I will)". Though the words are used thorough the piece, the added italics at the conclusion were... rather moving I thought. I will not question or second guess why you removed them... but... I must confess that I will reinsert them (at least in thought) each time I read this piece. And... I will, re-read this piece.
Another masterpiece,
SNM |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by afraid_of_fear on
Sunday, 26th September 2004 @ 12:50:08 PM AEST
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Nora this is truly beautiful.. so uplifting and positive. A wonderful poem; and i love the layout of it. Perfect.
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by Always on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 06:00:59 PM AEST
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| Almost brought a tear to my eye, the good kind of cry...*s* |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 11:37:56 PM AEST
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| You got a smile here. hehe. |
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Re: Inhale the Sky
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by Scarlett on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 04:47:30 AM AEST
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beautiful spirit lifting stuff.
" I will
comb the tattered yesterdays
from my salt-streaked hair"
loved that line, don't know what else to say. not one fault with this. you have a gift! x |
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