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spring
Contributed by
aernby
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Friday, 8th November 2002 @ 12:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Haiku
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a lover's touch,
a flower, a child's smile
ice out.
Copyright ©
aernby
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2002-11-08 12:00:00]
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Re: spring
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by OreO on
Friday, 8th November 2002 @ 03:08:38 PM AEST
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Very strong words
The way i see this poem
is that it describes how life
is, A lover's touch with a flower
leads to a child which in turn leads
to a child's smile and the ice out
im not sure, i think im trying to
analyze haiku poetry to much lol
Great write aernby, Thank you for
sharing, it's beautiful
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::.
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Re: spring
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by gina on
Saturday, 9th November 2002 @ 02:14:19 AM AEST
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| mmmmmmmmmm i think u forgot to write the rest of it, when u do , tell me plz i can't wait to see what happens next :P lol |
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Re: spring
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by Opium on
Saturday, 9th November 2002 @ 02:18:37 AM AEST
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This poem reminds me of ....of....of ....yes! of my hunting days!, indeed, well those words of wisdom shock me like a thunder no no! more like a 12 caliber shutgun charge, like the one I shoot birs with.
You really put the exact words that hunters seek!, these are words of life and death! and people might get hurt! ....I wonder how much time it took you to think them over! ...probably less than the time that took OREO to comment on it :PPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP |
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Re: spring
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by aernby on
Saturday, 9th November 2002 @ 03:07:50 AM AEST
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haiku in my experiece either come all in a shot, or in two shots -- this one came in two parts -- the first two lines (tho not in final form) came to me in the evening and were jotted down long hand -- third line and the final arrangement came the next afternoon when i got to the PC--
i am not yet able to spin off a haiku on the fly! |
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Re: spring
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 11th November 2002 @ 01:12:48 AM AEST
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i think i'll start writing haiku as well, i want ur opinion on this one called " summer"
PREGNANT LOVER
A FOLWER,A CHILD'S LAUGH
SUNSHINE |
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Re: spring
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 11th November 2002 @ 01:56:06 AM AEST
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| the last reply was by me , i just wanna tell u that i meant to write FRUIT in my poem , not flower |
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Re: spring
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by aernby on
Monday, 11th November 2002 @ 02:44:30 AM AEST
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it is a good start.
see Aha poetry's web site (try ahapoetry.com) or do a web search for haiku. anything by Jane Reichhold will steer you right---
aern+ |
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Re: spring
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 15th March 2003 @ 10:41:37 PM AEST
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| excellent, i love it:) |
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