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The Final Page
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Tuesday, 14th September 2004 @ 03:57:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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once upon a time,
there was a quiet happily ever after
that watched it from afar
and smiled,
in that way happily ever afters do,
to see its familiar sequence
grace the page
(it moved towards her
--she knew it did)
but then once upon a time
caught sight of the end
and fell madly in love
and, if it had once moved towards
happily ever after,
it now ardently pursued the end
and happily ever after drifted softly away
but once upon a time
didn't really notice,
because the end
(so beautiful it was)
was with it, now,
and so
they all lived happily ever after.
(the end)
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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2004-09-14 15:57:08]
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Re: The Final Page
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by Luinil on
Tuesday, 14th September 2004 @ 04:00:08 PM AEST
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| wow very creative and beautiful* |
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Re: The Final Page
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by Pyrofungus on
Tuesday, 14th September 2004 @ 08:12:41 PM AEST
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very interesting and creative...its great!
please comment on my work too
summer |
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Re: The Final Page
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by kidpoet_213 on
Tuesday, 14th September 2004 @ 08:45:25 PM AEST
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To quote Mr Spock from Star Trek... "Fascinating?" LOL
Interesting write... very creative...
~Donna~ |
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Re: The Final Page
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 04:35:20 AM AEST
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intresting and beautiful,
pixie xx |
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Re: The Final Page
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by markie on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 07:52:42 PM AEST
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| really unique and creative..but I'm confused. Did happily ever after drift away...or not? |
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Re: The Final Page
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by Bruce on
Thursday, 16th September 2004 @ 08:43:00 AM AEST
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| very creative, nice write |
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Re: The Final Page
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by EternitysLyre on
Thursday, 16th September 2004 @ 09:35:13 AM AEST
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To this point I sort of feel I need to break the silence and comment. This isn't the first time I read this poem; I truly doubt there will ever be a last. And, somehow, I also feel that this is one of those poems where my understanding of it isn't going to be common. You don't have to guess for you to conclude that I love the irony myself, but I think this poem is more than just creativity.
Like everything else you write, I think it's beautiful, and your grasp of free verse is simply one of those things I'll never really attain.
But...
Somehow, somehow...I feel like there's a mispelling starting on line three that persists all the way to the end. |
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Re: The Final Page
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by emospaztic on
Thursday, 16th September 2004 @ 11:30:49 AM AEST
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I don't quite get it... *rereads* AH! This is genious! Love ya!
-emo. |
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Re: The Final Page
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by SocialMisfit on
Thursday, 16th September 2004 @ 05:38:01 PM AEST
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nice, thought provoking write
SM |
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Re: The Final Page
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 17th September 2004 @ 03:44:38 PM AEST
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This is a very clever write, i admit i had to read it again to get the gist. you can tell a lot of thought has gone into this (please don't tell me it only took you 5 minutes to write!)
Very well presented.
wildejohnny. |
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Re: The Final Page
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 10:34:05 AM AEST
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I'm sorry i missed this hunni.
This confused me. lol. I have to be honest, and i've just read it 3 times and i still don't quite understand it.
You amaze me how you write, i could never do anything like this.
Something constructive... um...I'm afraid i can't really offer anything. It was all good.
Great write,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: The Final Page
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 26th September 2004 @ 03:54:14 PM AEST
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What a fun and clever play on words!
*smiles*
Stitch |
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Re: The Final Page
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 08:54:29 PM AEST
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| Oh how clever is this? Wonderful picture you have painted in our minds. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: The Final Page
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 09:52:26 PM AEST
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| I had to read it through twice, but I think i got it. (You'll have to let me know if I'm on the right track, I dont want to say more if I'm not...lol) You've personified happily ever after, once upon a time, and the end, and told a story about a story, in a sense. This is great. A very very sad sad poem, but great. |
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