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Naked Eyes
Contributed by
ShadowsCloud
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Friday, 8th November 2002 @ 03:30:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I come to you
my eyes naked
revealing all.
Hand trembling
you taste my insecurity
like virgin fruit in your mouth.
I smell your confidence.
It's an aura so bold,
you glow with it.
As I warm
your aura softens, fades,
and mine grows.
'Til entwined like serpents
you raise naked eyes to me...
And I smile, confidently.
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ShadowsCloud
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2002-11-08 03:30:00]
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Re: Naked Eyes
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by DreamWeaver on
Friday, 8th November 2002 @ 06:23:49 AM AEST
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| Isn't this just so true ... great poem ShadowsCloud ... love the way you write. |
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Re: Naked Eyes
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 8th November 2002 @ 06:53:15 AM AEST
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Super write, Cloud!! Loved it..
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Re: Naked Eyes
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by OreO on
Friday, 8th November 2002 @ 08:14:14 AM AEST
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This is beautiful, i enjoyed
this one, Great write.
Keep em' coming
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::.
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Re: Naked Eyes
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 03:13:17 AM AEST
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Both becoming confident within each others ability to actually get someone we hold as special into this lovely scary position, that might just last a lifetime, this time please!
Lovely writing again Candice, and try not to lose hope while searching for your father, there's always a chance you may be pleasantly surprised, and if not then there's always that closure thing again!
With love
Dean:-) |
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Re: Naked Eyes
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by ShadowsCloud on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 03:21:34 AM AEST
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Dean, thanks for your comments on this poem. As for my Father, I honestly think that what I really need is closure. You see my mom is getting married next year. And I am going to have a new step-father, and he is really a great guy. But because of my issues with my father, I can't let myself love my mom's fiance, because I am afraid of being hurt again. Even though I know that Carl (my mom's fiance) would never intentionally hurt me. But because of my father, I am just having a really hard time letting myself love someone in a position to love me like a father should. I really do need closure with my father so that I can move on with my life. Thanks again for your comment
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