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Couldn't Save You
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Saturday, 11th September 2004 @ 08:23:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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Couldn't Save You
Death is a part of life
That comes in due time
Something some fear
With glistening tears
Some have welcomed it
With nothing less
Than open acceptance
Ready for that part to happen
For one chapter to end
And for another to begin
Death is the end of existence
What you made of life
Is how you are remembered
For the rest of time
The regrets will always burn
As you see what you have become
In the eyes of those who didn't understand
As you look down with shame from up above
You died by your own choice
Being left in constant wonder
Thinking of how it could've been
With your idealistic views
That could've become true
But you'll never know
Your life was left undone
And that's how it's remembered
Now and forever
You slipped too far away
To the end of your existence
The chapter has ended
When you acted on impulse
And took your life that day
Forever I will remember
I couldn't save you then
From being hopeless
And ending your existence
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Re: Couldn't Save You
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by jaeann on
Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 12:00:20 AM AEST
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| forever i will remember.....yes......this was powerful.... |
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Re: Couldn't Save You
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by Bruce on
Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 12:47:30 AM AEST
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| I have chills from this write and how sorry I feel for you but you wrote your feelings and that for you, should be all that matters |
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Re: Couldn't Save You
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by veramouse on
Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 05:41:19 AM AEST
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yes, i know of many who suicided, such a powerful write, very touching.
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Re: Couldn't Save You
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by Luinil on
Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 08:21:22 AM AEST
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| terribly sad but exceptionally beautiful-- so sorry you had to deal with losing someone this way * |
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Re: Couldn't Save You
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by BrandySwanson on
Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 10:55:06 AM AEST
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very sad, heartfelt write. Sorry for your loss you've expressed your feelings so well in this poem. Hope your ok?
Brandy |
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Re: Couldn't Save You
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by ArdRi79 on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 03:30:37 AM AEST
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| You managed to share your insight while you expressed your sorrow without sinking into sentementality thats talent, showing so many different perspectives on the one issue in one short poem was genius Its what I really appreciate about your owrk. thanks for sharing this one |
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