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thoughts
Contributed by
randomguy
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Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 09:46:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I saw you last night
In a dream I had
You were there
In my head
You said things i didn't expect
I thought it was finally true
But when I woke to the world
I realized it was all false
It has been near a month since we last met
Yet I can't seem to leave it behind me
Why do my thoughts of you bring me pain
When it should only make me happy
Am I happy?
It may seem so, but no
I don't know where to go
I try to call you every day, but I don't
I see your number on my phone
It makes me hesitate every time I pass it
I think of past times
Did we have anything?
Or is it all in my head?
Whatever it might be
Please someone tell me
All I know is you are in my eveyday thoughts
You haunt my every dream
I close my eyes and it's you I see
Or is it that I just can't let you go?
I just don't know.
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randomguy
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Re: thoughts
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by brew on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 09:59:25 AM AEST
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| Not a bad writing at all...........sad tho.......Seems the heart is hurting deeply! |
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Re: thoughts
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by oldernotwiser on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 10:21:47 AM AEST
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| Keep writing and call her. |
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Re: thoughts
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by x_midnight_x on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 10:24:28 AM AEST
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many can relate to your words i enjoyed it :) as you are new to writing put no pressure on yourself,if you like it thats all that matters,we all go through stages of writing pieces that others love or do not get even 1 comment on....allow your mind to switch styles and go anywhere it wants and never feel silly about anything you post as theres no such thing as a bad poem really....if its from the heart,
blessings,
midnight x |
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Re: thoughts
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by poetmarie on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 12:21:14 PM AEST
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| Not bad at all. A mark of good poetry is something others can understand and even relate too. Keep writing. |
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Re: thoughts
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by Angelchild on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 02:02:56 PM AEST
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This brings up memories of my own about lost love. I can't tell you that you should keep calling, but I will say this,, if it is meant to be, then no matter what, it will come back to you.
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Re: thoughts
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by shelby on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 03:04:26 PM AEST
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this is very good though it seems your heart is in some limbo.great job Ill read all you write.Welcome to YPDC!
Michelle |
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Re: thoughts
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by Wachumiri on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 10:58:34 AM AEST
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Quite good. I like the way you use rhyme, but you don't make the poem depend on it. I like the way it almost seems like the poem is a dream, in the sense that you keep asking questions about how you feel, if it's real, things like that.
Take care,
David |
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