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From the Abyss
Contributed by
Hurretje
on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 07:05:01 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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As I carry sadness to another place
And wipe my harsh grounds clean
I feel the birds fly
From the inner court of my soul
As to protect my grazing face
The blinds are down
To quench the sun
And slake the clouds’ thirst
Please cry on me
Without hold
And drown my sorrows
Please cover me
In devouring desire
For rippling blue
Nothing more than this utter darkness
Nothing more than this silent storm
Who has ever seen
The dancing sand on the bottom of the sea?
I stare at you so high above
From deep below His heaven’s gate
For all that is
Died in my eyes
And never reached my soul
Please, sing for me
Just one more time
Our song of love
Full rhythm and rhyme
To sooth me when I cry
The words of your sweet lullaby
I send my words, my song, my prayer
From depths on which a black sun shines
If they survive the heat of Hell
And purgatory chill
Will you then receive them well
And carry me uphill?
Copyright ©
Hurretje
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2004-09-10 07:05:01]
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Re: From the Abyss
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by thumper on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 07:40:34 AM AEST
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Dark and beautiful. I like it. :o) "I send my words, my song, my prayer From depths on which a black sun shines" I feel like this alot. Kudos, Hur.
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Re: From the Abyss
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by x_midnight_x on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 07:43:33 AM AEST
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beautiful....full of imagery and the loneliness of a life without truely knowing,
blessings and best wishes,
midnight x |
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Re: From the Abyss
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by Stitch on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 07:57:18 AM AEST
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What a beautiful and heartbreaking tribute.
Stitch |
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Re: From the Abyss
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by arden on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 08:52:57 AM AEST
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this sent chills down my spine. not from being creeped out or anything, but it was just so good. i loved how its written and i like the saddness put into it.
its an amazing piece of work. i thoroughly enjoyed it.
well done.
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Re: From the Abyss
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 09:12:39 AM AEST
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This is great work, Hur. As you know I am not a fan of dark work but read this because I admire your work. You did an excellent job here. I must read you more.
Rita |
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Re: From the Abyss
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by poetmarie on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 12:36:52 PM AEST
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| This a great poem. Beautiful, I love it. The imagery really puts the reader in the poem, in the moment and experience. |
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Re: From the Abyss
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by venkat on
Saturday, 11th September 2004 @ 03:38:17 AM AEST
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| Excellent work. ..enjoyed its read..venkat |
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Re: From the Abyss
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by Silent_Composer on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 06:09:13 AM AEST
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Overwhelming strength in this poem, with a very gripping tale unfolding before my eyes, awesome write.
~Silence~ |
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Re: From the Abyss
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 08:26:15 PM AEST
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This leaves me without words. Stunning. The longing and beauty of this is palpable. Beyond excellent.
May your heart find light and hope to carry on.
Slàn.
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Re: From the Abyss
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by Cynthia on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 04:50:55 AM AEST
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| Oh wow. Hur, I loved this write. Very well done my friend. *S* Cynthia |
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