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Suicide
Contributed by
2bruisedandbeaten4you
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Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 02:11:21 AM in AEST
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Suicide
Love and hate/ desecrate/ this man/ his plan/ to be sane/ to never feel the pain/ of a broken heart/ or a slap in the face/ He hangs his head in disgrace/ “now I am broken/ my body wide open/ for abuse and ridicule/ my pain the fuel/ for their fire”/ the flames burn higher/ into the night/ what a sight/ a humbled man/ has done all he can/ to escape the torment/ of the mob/ he begins to sob/ “ why do I deserve this? / what have I done?”/ he takes the barrel of the gun/ and puts it in his mouth/ “ This is the most direct route/ to end this useless life of mine”/ he pulls the trigger and severs his spine/ blows his troubles out the back of his head/ now he is dead/ does he feel pain?/ the sting of cruel words/ or something much much worse?
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Re: Suicide
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by Silent_Composer on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 02:35:37 AM AEST
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Even with your compact style of writting you still manage to pour vivid feelings into it.
Awesome write, liked it from the beginning to the end.
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Re: Suicide
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 09:13:22 AM AEST
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Another good one. You have some good work.
The same as the other one though, in my opinion it would look great with some line breaks. But each to their own. It does not spoil the poem anyway.
I dunno why, but this sort of reminds me of something Mike Shinoda would do, you know, from Linkin park?
In my eyes, that is a good thing.
Great write, Phil xxx |
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