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The Wait in the Wood
Contributed by
luinil
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Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 06:01:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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Gentle rain stills earthly sound
Hope mirrored in a gathering pool
Forcibly hidden, waits to be found
Moon in daylight, naivety’s fool
Sleepless day in lustrous night
Staggers across borders of sane
With weeping eyes, awaits the sight
Of bringer of footsteps in the rain
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luinil
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2004-09-07 18:01:54]
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Re: The Wait in the Wood
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by Sirena_Degana on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 06:31:40 PM AEST
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Being a Wiccan I really understand and love this poem...it's utterly beautiful..
blessed be
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Re: The Wait in the Wood
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by Baronhawk on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 09:51:50 AM AEST
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| I might argue a bit with your choice of structure, perhaps with your rhytm and flow and most certainly it is a bit short to really capture the essence of the moment you are here portraying. But all in all and all those comments aside, I must admit that there is a suddeness to this poem which triggers a giddy sensation in the heart and brain as if one is the one waiting at that moment and in the face of the unknown. In an intrinsic wy you really do inscribe here a powerful spell, for a metaphor at least, which does conjure the image of a girl waiting in the woods... wondering what will the 'footsteps in the rain' bring. |
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