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Suffering in Silence
Contributed by
Nazmythian
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Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 03:35:51 AM in AEST
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Loneliness
it's all I feel
Emptiness
that's cold and real
Sitting on
this frigid floor
Rain is falling
outside my door
Suffering in silence
Everything
is lost in time
Not having
rythm or rhyme
Reality
goes on and on
Look around
I know you're gone
Suffering in silence
Darkness is
closing me in
Black just like
an evil sin
Cigarette
that's in my hand
Silhouettes
this broken man
Suffering in silence
No one there
to hear my cry
No one there
to tell me why
Now this room's
an empty cell
Empty walls
I know so well
Suffering in silence
All I knew
taken for granted
All my dreams
are disenchanted
All my days
now run together
Every hour
seems like forever
Suffered in silence
I'm suffering in silence
May 12, 1990
Copyright ©
Nazmythian
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 03:52:21 AM AEST
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Very sad but so powerfull is the written word!
Hang tuff, my friend as joy cometh in the morning.
Great writing!
luv, huggs, hope,
emy |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by thumper on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 05:57:58 AM AEST
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Strong but simple. Nice. The statement at the emd of each stanza (?) drives home the pain felt. Kudos!
Thumps ; 0) |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by FleurdeSang on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 10:07:33 AM AEST
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O sweet poet! Such pain! Such sorrow! You are not alone in this... Heart-wrenching piece, beautifully written. Short, yet, it describes your pain so vividly... I am sorry for this anguish that Life has given you. But there shall be more of this horrid thing. Such is life... There will be days that will chew you up, and spit you out; and there will be days that will be remembered forever... A kiss from your lover, a smile from your children, bright summer days filled with happiness... May all your days be like this, you deserve it, as do all... Do not keep your emotions inside; they will build until you are choking on them, slowly dying... I know this feeling very well, mon ami cheri. Lots of smiles and comfort going your way! All my love and blessings to you!! Thank you so much for sharing this excruciatingly sad write. Your soul is slowly being revealed to me, and it is a gorgeous, yet, anguish-filled soul... Much love. Forever yours,
Your dearest friend and devoted fan,
Fleur* (Stephy) |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by AspenGlow on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 12:15:31 PM AEST
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I like this poem, says volumns, especially the emptiness and then I had to see the cigarette......to be in the company of the cigarette.......now its so lonesome here.
Excellent write, thanks for sharing.
Chris |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 12:34:46 PM AEST
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A powerful write my friend, with a very sad and lonely feeling. Repeating the suffering line throughout the poem really adds to the power of the emotion.
Good job, Willofree |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 04:59:45 PM AEST
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| this is a beautiful write naz. i loved the part were you said you had no rythm or rhyme. and it didn't really flow with the peice. i don't know if it was intentional but you should say it was and people would be all like" man that was cool". anyway excellent stuff here. |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by critterhideaway on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 05:57:26 PM AEST
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| Suffering in silence and being alone. I know all about alone. Good poem I like it |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 08:56:25 PM AEST
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| wow. i love how you tie it all back with "suffering in silence" which is almost a poem in itself, it says so much. And, the cold, lonely image of the "frigid floor" just really keeps the theme going of the ultimate pain and loneliness. :-P Glad you commented so I found that you have a wealth of poems for me to read!! :-P Thanks for sharing them! |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by katyqueen35 on
Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 03:17:00 AM AEST
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Awww so sad and emotional stuff.
hope for the best naz and don't look back.,
I can understand what your going through in this write.
I feel like that once in a blue moon.
good write. |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by yellow_sundragon on
Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 09:51:07 AM AEST
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I love the beat in this, it just flowed so easily.
Thanks for sharing it.
Jaime |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by arden on
Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 07:33:05 PM AEST
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very strong poem. i was simply amazed throughout the whole poem at how well written it is and how it sucks the reader in.
it was a awesome poem. nicely done scott :)
Becky |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by bernard on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 01:10:36 AM AEST
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| Great Poem Naz but I hope it is not written from your own personal feelings. It comes over us all especially poets I think they have to suffer so that their poetry can be given that little something that sets it apart. 5/5 from bernard. |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by a_bear on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 11:05:27 AM AEST
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| I really like the rythem..or meter or whatever..I hate the cigarette...but don't mind me. I'm an anti-smoker. |
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Re: Suffering in Silence
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by WinterFawn on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 12:30:48 PM AEST
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Oh...this really struck a cord with me. Very emotional verse. Suffering in silence is a very lonely place to be. This is an awesome poem and you have expressed those feelings beautifully here.
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