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Not just a picnic!

Contributed by 03614 on Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 11:05:08 PM in AEST
Topic: Lifepoems

This is not just a picnic;
There are secrets that lies behind it!
When you turn to your left,
you see a dark and silent cave.
And look deeply inside
there, you'll see a rejected life
of a young naked man
The cave has been his hidden place
away from the agony and tragedy of life
The cave is a strong stabled huge rock,
a dark cave under the sky,
standing up from the soil,
among the grasses and sands,
beside the deep blue sea.

This is not just a picnic;
There are secrets that lies behind it!
When you turn to your right,
you see the calm blue sea,
as blue as the sky.
The sudden wave is a dog;
rushing to the side of the beach
on the wet sands for its bone.
The sea tide cannot be swept away,
it stands as the journey of life.
It is the long and fearful journey,
with a predictable end.

This is not just a picnic!
There a secrets that lies behind it.
When you look around you,
you see the curious naked people,
both children and their parents,
waiting for an easy way to enjoy the free life
that has been given to them, a special gift from God.
They are the hopeless, working hard to regain their lost hope.
They believe that one day, this whole misery journey
would come to an end.
This is not just a picnic;
There are secrets that lies behind it!

Copyright © 03614 ... [ 2004-09-06 23:05:08]
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Re: Not just a picnic! (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 11:26:12 PM AEST
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Very good write......great use of metaphors...
Enjoyed this a lot....
Jenni....

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