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Which way?
Contributed by
XxNights_ChildxX
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Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 08:24:29 PM in AEST
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They say to let go of the darkness, of everything that I know,
I have tryed my hardest and now the pain is starting to show,
I can't rid my mind of all of these negative thoughts,
It's like Im in this giant net and it feels like I am caught,
Being pulled every which way, I just get confused more and more,
I don't think Im strong enough, I think I'll eventually close the door,
I think that I'll give up, and just go back to the way I like best,
Being sad, unhappy, annoyed, and of course depressed,
I don't like the colours, they blind my darkened eyes,
The light is just to bright whenever Im beneath the skies,
I like my cold, lonely darkness, where I feel safe and life feels true,
I wont let them take it away, no matter what they do....
Or am I just lieing to myself, do I want to be set free?
From all of the pain that is dweling deep down inside of me,
I just don't understand, and I don't even know why...
All that I really know that is if I wanted to be happy, I wouldn't want to die.
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Re: Which way?
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 09:27:59 PM AEST
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| strong write. i like how your lines are long, most people write like i do, with 5 to 6 words as max per line, and that is tiring and it makes the piece seem unbearably long sometimes. you just great rhyme in this and emotion. i write about this stuff a lot, and its nice to see it presented in a new way. i liked the very last line, very nice. sometimes being stubborn is a good thing, but more often than not it isnt. but being completely open minded and easily swayed equals definant distruction. i guess you have to find the balance that suits you. |
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Re: Which way?
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by THORN on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 06:45:15 AM AEST
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AWESOME!!!!!! LOVED IT!!!!!!
Nice use of words ;)
5 stars! =D
Cheers,
-XRaye |
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