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I Tried
Contributed by
Nazmythian
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Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 11:14:03 AM in AEST
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( Sorry, I jus' spelt it, tha way I herd it )
When I woke up this mornin’
The pain in my head
Was a good indication
I wasn’t yet dead
And if I had tha chance
I’d do it all over again
We’d been ridin’ all night
Tryin’ ta track Jessie down
Followed his trail
To a south western town
He was headed for Mexico
With a couple a his wounded friends
Now I’m jus’ a farm boy
Who’s been deputized
I ain’t never killed nuthin’
Never taken a life
It was just a stray bullet
Least that’s what somebody said
They rode into town
Guns a blazin’ for fun
Once the smoke had then settled
And all was said and done
A body was lyin’ in the street
My lil’ sister was dead
I took Pappy’s rifle
Down off a the wall
Rode into town
And I answered the call
For a few willin’ men
To go after that gun totin’ kid
We was hot on his heels
Been chasin’ him two weeks
Thought we had him cornered
Down next to some creek
With no way to escape
But ya know, somehow he did
He knew we was comin’
An’ he set up a trap
Covered his trail
As they doubled back
And suddenly we’re the ones left
With no where to go
They come down out the hills
Shootin’ all that they got
The air full a bullets
The temperature hot
The only thing saved us
Is we had more men than our foe
But with nine of us wounded
And three been cut down
He rode away
And we lost some ground
And it took us a day
Jus ta patch up so’s we could ride
Now I been shot in the shoulder
Got a bullet in ma thigh
Bleedin’ ta death
Starin’ up at the sky
Writin’ down these words
Please tell my Momma ~
I tried
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Nazmythian
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2004-09-03 11:14:03]
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Re: I Tried
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by all4him on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 11:23:10 AM AEST
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| hey AWESOME people written so well! Good job. keep up the good work |
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Re: I Tried
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by RavenShadows on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 11:23:23 AM AEST
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| I usually like the darker stuff, but this was awesome! Great write. |
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Re: I Tried
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 01:03:18 PM AEST
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You have great versatility. Not just stuck in the same venue all the time. I like that trait. This was good. I enjoyed it. Just put things in General if you don't know where to put them.
Rita |
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Re: I Tried
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by sweetangeluk on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 02:48:56 PM AEST
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First rate loved this
Love Sweetangelukxxx |
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Re: I Tried
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 03:27:17 PM AEST
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I enjoyed this very much..Thank you for sharing it..
Jenni |
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Re: I Tried
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by venkat on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 05:00:52 AM AEST
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| Good way of story telling..thoroughly enjoyed it... venkat |
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Re: I Tried
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 06:58:10 AM AEST
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Well there you go again being versatile. It was great fun to read, really unique. I really enjoyed reading the "Western". Keep them coming....
Fun read, Willofree |
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Re: I Tried
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by FleurdeSang on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 05:39:52 PM AEST
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Well, we're jus' a rough n' tough cowboy, aren' we? Excruciatingly delicious, this taste of western life you have provided us! I have enjoyed two years of my existence in the country life, and it is beautiful! Very intriguing and versatile! I agree with all, this is an incredible write, and satisfyingly different! I am now reminiscing about the old times, as tears cascade down my cheeks... I miss it so much! Thank you for reminding me on how gorgeous and real the country life was, and forever shall be! The conclusion of this masterpiece was horrendously sad; this one is truly a heart wrencher! Dearest Naz, precious, talented poet, never stop writing! Keep ridin' on, cowboy! All my love to you! Once again, incredible write! Eternally yours,
Fleur de souffrance (Stephy) |
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Re: I Tried
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by critterhideaway on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 08:34:51 PM AEST
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| Really neat!! I liked this, thank you |
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Re: I Tried
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 11:32:37 PM AEST
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This is was 'just' in your head that morning??? I'd love to know what kind of coffee you're drinkin' over there - I should like to get some!
Yes - different... wonderfully different! Light and witty and still somehow tugs at the reader's heart. Personally, I think you've got it in the right category - 'tis one fine bit o' story tellin' afterall!
Feelin' rather bad fo' Momma,
SNM |
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Re: I Tried
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 12:01:48 AM AEST
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Well u shore picked it up so good that it takes one to the scene...Jessie James is a very great legand in these parts, (Southeast Arkansas USA)
Incredible writing.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy
this was in my fthers day and he's shared some of the tales etc.
a masterpeice!
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Re: I Tried
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 11:23:35 AM AEST
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Well we'uns here in Texas just love ol' cowpoke ditty's! We need a topic: cowpoke ditty's! lol 'Cause you'uns gots it down to a tee! lol
Ok my english is not like that, only been in texas a year! lol But I likes the ditty,sadness and all! :-)
Angel always...joni |
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Re: I Tried
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 02:06:14 AM AEST
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| comical savvy and sad. this was a tornada ofa read.naz my good buddy youa let'em have it in this one. yippe kiyiya pardner.lol |
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Re: I Tried
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 24th April 2006 @ 01:19:25 PM AEST
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| Just got tolt 'bout this critter, said ya don't write much like this nowadays. Hope that ain't true. I'm a cowboy don't like ridin' solo on this site, as a poet, I mean. Great story, sad fer sis, and I think ya left endin' opportunity fer resurrection of the cowboy so's the white hat good guy wins in a healin' way. |
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