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I'm sorry
Contributed by
corrupted_minds
on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 03:14:26 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I do my best,
I try to try,
But every turn,
Just makes me cry,
All I do is wrong,
It's never right,
When i start to care,
'we start to fight,
I love you,
But I've kept it inside,
Can't you see it now,
All the times I've cried,
I tore my own heart out,
and placed it in a box,
tied it with a ribbion,
and saw it as no loss,
But you never opened it,
You needent even see,
The lonely heart in the box,
was from ellucide old me,
Can't make things right again,
Couldn't even in the start,
Now I say goodbye,
My ships about to part,
I want to say I'm sorry,
For all that I've done,
I'll pay it back,
But now I'll run,
Every drop of blood from my body,
Will drip from my skin,
And Don't even burry my body,
Just chuck it in the bin,
That's all I'm worth,
I've done nothing for you,
I've tried and failed,
To be a friend that's true,
I be myself,
But myself is wrong,
Can't make you happy now,
But it wont be long,
Not long till it's over,
Not long till it's said,
Not long till you notice,
My hearts already dead,
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Re: I'm sorry
(User Rating: 1 ) by Chrissylee on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 03:22:26 AM AEST (User
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nice write and kind of jolted me a bit cause i kinda get the feeling my bf has done the same thing |
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Re: I'm sorry
(User Rating: 1 ) by iluvpencils on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 03:23:29 AM AEST (User
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Wow. I love this poem. You're obviously talented. It was filled with emotion and I felt every word. I'm very sorry for your pain though. I can understand how you feel but try not to beat yourself up to badly about whatever you feel you've done. =) *hugs* |
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Re: I'm sorry
(User Rating: 1 ) by artostuff on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 03:40:14 AM AEST (User
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I like this, its a emotional read. Very good imagery. Thank you. |
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Re: I'm sorry
(User Rating: 1 ) by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 04:25:14 AM AEST (User
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beautiful |
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Re: I'm sorry
(User Rating: 1 ) by inoc on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 06:11:36 AM AEST (User
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you put this poem together wonderfully
I hope your heart starts beating again!
[because you are such a great poet]
keep writing
cheers! |
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Re: I'm sorry
(User Rating: 1 ) by Dizza_13 on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 04:21:37 PM AEST (User
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very sad and emotional. Very well writin. I hope that
some one will find your heart
love always, dizza
xoxoxox |
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Re: I'm sorry
(User Rating: 1 ) by Hakiokusaken on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 09:48:18 PM AEST (User
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That was absolutely Great, I enjoyed reading it, although it is very sad. beautiful write. Hang in there. Excellent Write.
HAKIOKUSAKEN |
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Re: I'm sorry
(User Rating: 1 ) by Row on
Wednesday, 27th October 2004 @ 01:23:56 AM AEST (User
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good work loz |
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Re: I'm sorry
(User Rating: 1 ) by Craze on
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you have some heavy words and you are pretty deep great job |
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