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I Alone
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 11:43:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I, I alone have felt the deepest desperation I have ever known.
Walked across fields of death. Felt the coldest black air whisper on my cheeks.
Had the silence scream so loud,
I couldn't hear myself speak.
Bones around me tripping me up.
Bitter reminders of memories past.
I, I have stared into the eyes of evil,
Passed many mirrors along the way.
Talked to the trees, Sreamed my name in the wind.
Crawled through twisted thorns of pain.
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Re: I Alone
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 11:55:05 PM AEST
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Has a very poignant and lonely feel. Nice write.
Rita |
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Re: I Alone
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by Jenn2004 on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 12:58:59 AM AEST
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| Good write i feel like that alot. |
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Re: I Alone
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by Jenn2004 on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 12:59:30 AM AEST
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| Good write i feel like that alot. |
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Re: I Alone
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 01:32:55 AM AEST
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| brilliant, u have great talent |
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Re: I Alone
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by inoc on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 06:48:41 AM AEST
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like the last line expecially,,,,
-crawled through twisted thorns of pain-
a unique poem
thanks for sharing
cheers! |
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Re: I Alone
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by AspenGlow on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 08:34:29 AM AEST
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This is a beautiful poem, and have been there many a dark and dreary eve.
Thank you for sharing, this is a #1.
Chris |
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Re: I Alone
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by kidpoet_213 on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 09:43:59 PM AEST
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U do have a great talent... don't ever lose it... or let it slip...
This is brilliantly written... it has that raw edgy feel to it... that's great... very lonely... Keep writing...
~Donna~ |
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Re: I Alone
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by OzChick on
Saturday, 11th February 2006 @ 10:44:42 PM AEST
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Powerful write Laura. I have felt this way at times.
~Jenny~ |
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Re: I Alone
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 30th March 2006 @ 05:23:07 AM AEST
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Aw, sad, Laurabean. :-( It's very well written though.
I like the way you did that "hesitation" thing there...you know...the "I, I alone....I, I have stared." Kinda gave it a musical feel, like a song with a rhythm and a beat.
Nice touch.
Thanks,
Tim
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