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Resting Next to Death!
Contributed by
arius-inues
on
Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 09:03:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Cutting with my Razor Blade,
Death does not come quick enough,
Drizzling from my veins,
Pours a crimson fluid,
Of hatred and of despair,
Of sorrow and of memories,
Slowly it seeps,
Through the wound,
That I forged,
The blood that flows,
Is not fast enough,
So I lay on my bed,
And I feel her,
Resting next to me,
Waiting to take my,
Soul away,
And relieve me,
Of this life!
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arius-inues
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2004-09-02 21:03:29]
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Re: Resting Next to Death!
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by jaeann on
Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 09:19:49 PM AEST
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| you make her breath smell so sweet....... |
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Re: Resting Next to Death!
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 09:59:50 PM AEST
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| excellent write. i have a problem with the last line though. "of this life" just came at me from nowhere. i was expected it to be "of this pain" or something of the like because of the rhyme and flow you had going, but i loved all of this except for that. keep up the excellent work, i can tell im going to have to remember your member name. |
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Re: Resting Next to Death!
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by Arius-Inues on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 08:57:15 PM AEST
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| Well thats what I was going for but it just came out this way, and I thank you ever so much for the flatering compliment. |
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