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The Love of the Lentils
Contributed by
EternitysLyre
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Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 08:12:38 AM in AEST
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"Each second’s stale senescence steals as
spindling strands are spun; Better an immortal star
than the predestined sun"
Tales retold retell of bold and bravest might and mirth
Resewn, disguised behind fond eyes and huddled 'round the hearth
From lips to lips the legend rips, all blazing from their birth
The lore of yore (and golden shores) about men of this earth.
Through blinds the mind's stiff fiddles find in fable's words serene
Repose from those whose pointed prose bring down the burden's girth
Both crystal climes and sweet sublimes amidst ravines pristine
(The irony of looking up to those deep in the earth.)
While ventures brighten and enlighten shallowest of hopes
The dreams which teem encloud with reams of castles built on air
The sullied race from all disgrace and mangled misanthropes
Are all for naught nor battles fought for heroes leave no heir.
In brilliant blaze the revels raze and symbolize the praised
Beliefs which glows in mackled plows and shines away the dearth
And though the phoenix, golden, true from ashes hither raise
Those who burns the brightest hues—
(—Those who sing the shortest fuse—)
The soonest fade to earth.
"I don’t shine."
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Re: The Love of the Lentils
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by Rakerman1999 on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 08:39:12 AM AEST
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In fact you do shine. Your talent shines for all to see in your poetry my friend. This is no common write and few could have mastered the complex patterns you have made look so easy here.
Impressed beyond words
Barkeep!!
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Re: The Love of the Lentils
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 08:15:50 AM AEST
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This is the third time I've come back, and now I think i'll finally leave a comment.
"Better an immortal star
than the predestined sun"
I feel this poem is much in correlation with my response to 'A Query' of Nora's (as far as I can remember) . . . and as to the quote;
I'm thinking you mean that you are neither star nor sun, phoenix nor ash, particle nor wave . . .
Indeed, hermetic - amongst other things. Floral, with depth and consistency . . . although those without the proper thesaurus and bravery / patience to look deeper will find this overpowering and complex.
Have you ever tried writing something intentionally simplistic? |
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Re: The Love of the Lentils
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 08:26:04 PM AEST
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indeed you shine through. ever since i have started reading your poetry i have been entraced. i hope you do not do anything simply. people are drawn to you for what you do and the others who can't figure you out, well that's their problom. you are a profound and perfectly perplexing poet. peace and love,
Dane |
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Re: The Love of the Lentils
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 10th September 2004 @ 10:54:25 AM AEST
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I believe that you are making a comparison, recognizing the talent you so obviously possess, you compare yourself to a star whose light shines, but is diminished by that of the sun, ( or those you feel may posess greater talent ), and that those of such intense burning do tend to extinguish at a much increased rate. A truly impressive write to me that states, I might be good, but I'm not that good. If I am correct in my interpretation ( and even if I'm not, for I am entitled to my opinion ) I must say that this is to date the most inticate write I have yet to read in pattern, flow, and meter, and you are truly a gifted individual.
Hat in hand, I bow to a master poet.
Nazmythian ~ |
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