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Help!!
Contributed by
Sordida
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Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 04:09:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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All of a sudden I’m confused
I don’t want this anymore
I don’t believe in love or friendship
Nothing is real I can’t see the light
Please no more nothing is good
He says talk is makes things better
He lies and I hate him
Why don’t I hate him?
PLEASE let me hate him
He’s the only friend I’ve got
He wants to make things better
Nothing is better
In this downward spiral
Copyright ©
Sordida
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2004-09-01 16:09:37]
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Re: Help!!
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by Chrissylee on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 05:35:00 PM AEST
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| bit of advice pick yourself up dust yourself off and start all over again... nice choice of words to ask for help well done |
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Re: Help!!
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by waos on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 08:58:27 PM AEST
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i liked that a lot cause i know what you mean when you want to hate someone but you cant no matter what it seems and all they want to do is help. except i went too far and now he doesn't try to help like he used to.
dont push him away.. hold him as close as you can if that's what will help you.. because i lost someone |
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Re: Help!!
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 10:46:58 PM AEST
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| good write in the beginning. the rest just doesnt fit in with the style. your redundace use of hate, him, and better in so few lines takes away the greatness of this. |
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Re: Help!!
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 02:21:14 AM AEST
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| i know how u feel, great poem |
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Re: Help!!
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by emphaticplacebo on
Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 08:52:19 AM AEST
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| Really nice write. I can really relate to this, as I feel like that most of the time. You describe your feelings really well, and overall nicely done |
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