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One Removed
Contributed by
waos
on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 10:15:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I can feel you slam the doors.
I can feel you.
I can smell your flesh...
your stinking, rotting flesh;
the acrid stench of your breath releasing words.
"I don't give a *****."
You're rotting from the inside out.
In my mind I see
the hole forming,
growing,
controlling.
I see you raise your hands.
I see you throw your words.
I see the death inside you.
I see,
I feel,
from outside myself,
my only safe haven so far inside
I'm as one above,
a spectator.
I see.
I feel.
As one removed.
Copyright ©
waos
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2004-08-31 22:15:16]
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Re: One Removed
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 11:23:35 PM AEST
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As I feel at the moment, but that doesnt concern any but me.
I like how your words scream out emotions, and the gory yet vivid images that overflow.
To feel this way many must go through the same yet your words portrayed exactly the way you are feeling.
Awesome poem.
Take care
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Re: One Removed
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 02:06:28 AM AEST
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Your emotions center stage.......A good way
to express yourself.......get rid of the rage!
Good poem
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