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Taken
Contributed by
girltranscended
on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 05:04:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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At first glance I am taken
to a place of possibility
And in my mind I find
I can escape my own humility.
The fire and magic of a first kiss
I willingly remember
And my heart knows, before my mouth speaks,
already planning my surrender.
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girltranscended
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2004-08-31 17:04:47]
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Re: Taken
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by darkplaidbabe on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 05:34:21 PM AEST
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short, sweet, and beautiful. nicley done!
~brynna~ |
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Re: Taken
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 07:08:52 PM AEST
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meh, passion is passion... so worth the risk. this is nice, i like it!!
~Remy~ |
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Re: Taken
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 08:29:44 PM AEST
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You've captured those first few moments of attraction and passion remarkably well for so few words.
And yes the pleasure of surrender...or too soon surrender is risky, but....
well done! |
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Re: Taken
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by WildfireRose on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 01:30:16 AM AEST
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| aww that was cute, good job! |
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Re: Taken
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 4th September 2004 @ 01:29:06 AM AEST
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Ohhhhh GT - I like this!!!!! I don't know how you managed it - but you've put into eight lines what would have taken me a couple dozen lines to express (that's assuming, I could manage to express it!). This is fabulous!
And by the way... I don't think you ever really forget. Thank goodness!
SNM |
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Re: Taken
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by TheManagement on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 03:59:24 PM AEST
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| i like it. keep it up! ^-^ |
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Re: Taken
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by TedHuggableBare on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 10:38:18 PM AEST
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| Taken is how the heart reacts to that crazy little thing called love (and even lust). I loved your poem. |
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Re: Taken
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 06:50:04 AM AEST
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Risky is putting it mildly. I'd love to do a study of people who get into cars shortly after experiencing a first kiss. I think the accident numbers might tell us something. Sometimes I wonder if love is an excuse to get stupid. Well, this one certainly got me thinking. Thanks for sharing.
Stitch |
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