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Sonnet of a Champion
Contributed by
Gentledove
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Monday, 30th August 2004 @ 01:51:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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A champion is distingushed at birth,
You're given a heart that won't break apart.
You make yourself known, you show us your worth,
Your dedication, to the world impart.
next you're given a triumphant spirit,
Trials and tragedy you take in stride.
You're always trying to push the limit,
You never give up, you can't be denied.
You're given the courage to make the right choice,
You have the strength to withstand the punishment.
In your accomplishments you can rejoice,
You are flexible, humble and valiant.
A champion is all of these and more,
You give of yourself, it is not a chore
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This is my first attempt at a sonnet. The form is correct
14 lines with 10 syllables each with alternating lines of rhyme
except the very last two that do rhyme
but it doesn't have a problem or a solution.
Copyright ©
Gentledove
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2004-08-30 01:51:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Sonnet of a Champion
(User Rating: 1 ) by Gabriel on
Monday, 30th August 2004 @ 02:03:08 AM AEST (User
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i love the idea behind this poem...my only thoughts were on the 3rd quatrain...to be a true sonnet, punishment and valiant would have to rhyme...and also the rhyme between choice and rejoice seems a little forced...i might rethink that quatrain...but all together great poem |
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Re: Sonnet of a Champion
(User Rating: 1 ) by Thunderwolf on
Monday, 30th August 2004 @ 02:22:11 AM AEST (User
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Babe, this is a wonderful write. Keep up the good work.
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Re: Sonnet of a Champion
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 30th August 2004 @ 09:58:17 AM AEST (User
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Beautiful work, Gay. Keep on penning.
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Re: Sonnet of a Champion
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Monday, 30th August 2004 @ 09:09:36 PM AEST (User
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This was a perfect sonnet.......I loved every single word of it. As I was reading I couldn't help think........the death of a person is more important than their birth....for they have proven who they really are by the way the lived. They have left tracks behind for all to see!
Marvelous, Bravo!
Rose at your feet!
consue |
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