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Poetic Pornography
Contributed by
abnormalpunk
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Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 12:39:57 AM in AEST
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"please do not be so mean"
you cry so helplessly
you shed your tears in words poems you write
but hate comments put critically
'cause you want acceptance
and you want to be good
but you never knew what poetry was
and yes i am being very rude
but i choose to stay honest
because of losers like you
who hope that someone will cherish
the **** that you do
excuse my language
but you used the rest of the dictionary
to make your pitiful poems
oh so "ordinary"
just shut up and speak the language
of where youre living now
why try to impress the world
when you really dont know how
im sick of all you gothic poets
who cry about the pain inside
just go outside and get a tan
and quit always tryin to hide
all you people who write about anger
and about your emotions
dont give us bull **** definitions
just come out and show us
what you feel in a poem
not a group of SAT words
you never make sense
why say "fecis" when you can say "turds"
my point through all this stupidity
is stop tryin to be what youre not
write about the way you really are
or have you all forgot
its sad what people call poetry today
if you can write 3 pages from a phrase
they call you a great poet
and they give you all the praise
but poetry is simple
and it should be fun as well
if its about love
or being damned to hell
in the end all im saying
is stop pretending fake men
take off these masks you wear
and be yourselves again
Copyright ©
abnormalpunk
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Re: Poetic Pornography
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by MomentInTime on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 02:32:04 AM AEST
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It is all very well to write a poem which reflects your opinions on people who cannot (or do not) accept criticism, but your poem does more than that: it attacks a whole range of people.
If you wish to take the time to read the poetry I've submitted you will find that my writings cover a range of topics (or life issues if you like), and whether or not they are to your liking is independent of the fact that, from the first line to the last, I do not stray from the point or purpose of each poem.
Vent you anger as much as you wish BUT stick to the point that you are trying to make in the first place.
From my point of view, this is what separates the grain from the chaff.
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Re: Poetic Pornography
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by Flipped_out on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 02:33:27 AM AEST
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Woahhh! angst poem or what, , but your writing shows me, between the lines, also a great sense of humour
I appreciate bad criticism, along with the good, if meant honestly.bad criticism helps make me rethink, like it did with one of your comments to me... I am now having a go at rewriting, one of mine,, as afterwards I looked at it and thought..hey hes right, it is lame...
So I honestly thank you
bring it on lol
Kell x |
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Re: Poetic Pornography
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by veramouse on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 04:12:29 AM AEST
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You know, i like poetry, i cant write it,.. but i like it, ..i am very simple, i like to be uplifted, and, yes, some of the poetry on here makes me sad, the poets that write about cutting and killing themselves, should do themselves a favour, and the rest of us, i suggest they spend a few hours at the local hospital, visit the burns unit, or chat to cancer patients, .the list goes on, you cant be that hard done by, lets face it, you can string a few words together, and have an internet connection, more than 70% of the worlds population.
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Re: Poetic Pornography
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 10:36:27 AM AEST
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I like constructive critisism, in fact, i welcome it, but you are attacking the way people write here...
You want some critisim? I'll give you some.
"my point through all this stupidity
is stop tryin to be what youre not
write about the way you really are
or have you all forgot"
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"im sick of all you gothic poets
who cry about the pain inside
just go outside and get a tan
and quit always tryin to hide"
That is below the belt, one moment you say that we should write about who we are, then you have ago at 'gothic poets' who obviously are writing about who they are.
You do not make sense in that bit, and you are contradicting yourself.
"why say "fecis" when you can say "turds""
Some people prefer to write like that. Have you ever thought they like to write like that and are not doing it 'to make our pitiful poems oh so "ordinary', as you put it ?
I also object to people being told to kill themselves if they don't like critisim.
This whole poem is unfair to several sorts of poets, and it shows lack of respect for anyones feelings. People should be able to write how they wish. You have no right to have a go at a way someone writes.
There is a difference between constructive critism and an attack, and i as one of those poets that write about my true feeling and use words that describe better feel as if i have been attacked.
Please think about this. I do not say it to be rude, i am saying it as it is how i feel.
And i for one write for myself, and i always will. And i will continue to write the way i do because I like it.
Phil xxx |
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Re: Poetic Pornography
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by Heartfilledblood on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 03:59:36 PM AEST
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I dont know whats more funny. The fact that your so stupid for even writing this, or the fact that you put this together well and expressed your feelings very well. There is nothing wrong with the poem from my stand point but you as a person are one stupid F***.
There are somethings I agree with you on this but other than that why the F*** are you getting ***** over how people act. I think you let this bother you just so you can be "COOL" and go against all the "GothS". I feel you want people to be angry with you because it gives you some sort of feeling that you have been craving. Your just one stupid a**, poetry is free and should be expressed how anyone wants too. So what if they dont take your critisism well, your just angry because they didnt listen too you and that *****es you off. You have no real reason to be angry you just are like every other goth writing about stuff that they dont need to be depressed about. |
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Re: Poetic Pornography
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by shorty_52 on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 04:13:16 PM AEST
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well i hope that u take critasism well, because that is all that will get with that peice of **** poem. if ur sick of reading that kind of poetry then dont' read it.. god dam*. poetry is expressing urself that is y ppl write about stuff like that.
by the way this poem was acctually well written. so i'm not going to critisise anymore. but next time think b4 u write it. ppl write the stuff they write for a reason.
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Re: Poetic Pornography
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 08:30:09 PM AEST
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Oh, that YPDC could be free of such arrogant idiocy as this! Why is it that some people must needs use the internet to be malicious? A sad world we have here.
Need I remark on the nonsense enshrined in this rather unpoetic foolishness?
but you never knew what poetry was
Ha! And someone thinks he does...
excuse my language
but you used the rest of the dictionary
to make your pitiful poems
oh so "ordinary"
Ha! Perhaps he used the dictionary... Some of us have vocabularies of our own. They're wonderful things to have.
just shut up and speak the language
of where youre living now
Where are we living now? Somewhere better, perhaps. One can hope.
what you feel in a poem
not a group of SAT words
you never make sense
why say "fecis" when you can say "turds"
How well did you do on the SAT, anyway? And when it comes to the question of (I presume you meant to spell)feces or turds, how about not saying either of those words? That might look even better in a poem.
my point through all this stupidity
is stop tryin to be what youre not
write about the way you really are
or have you all forgot
Nice of you to be who you really are. Now please don't let us see it ever again.
Methinks I note the undercurrent of insincerity. You don't really care about poetic form as much as you do hurting people, do you? That, or you're markedly bad at making a point.
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Re: Poetic Pornography
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by darkplaidbabe on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 09:40:25 PM AEST
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alright listen, im not gonna bash your write, as a member of the site and a person yourself you do have poetic license to say what you like. But, i will say that i think the purpose of this poem is souly to hurt people and thats what i dont like about it. im not some peace lovin hippy or something but theres no reason to rudely criticize people for expressing thier emotions and wanting to be accepted for it. personally i would love some construction criticism every once in a while but i write to show MY feelings and not to please YOU. i put the poems on the site because others might enjoy reading them, not simply because i want them to love me.
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