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Dreaming in Shadows
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 10:03:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Under the moon, in shadows
I exist
Real and true, even if only
A wish
Oh! when the sun falls down again
Close your eyes, baby - picture me then
You’ll find the door to possibility there
Throw it open and ascend the stairs
I’m waiting there to lead you down the hall
Ready to catch you if you should fall
Wishes are meant to one day come true
And in dark of night, I will come to you
Standing near enough for you to tell
That dreams extend beyond stairwells
And baby, if you dream well enough
You’ll feel the brush of my gentle touch
Oh! reach for me and promise that when
The moonlight’s music plays again
You'll follow me into shadowed rooms
Time is short, dawn is coming soon
My hand waits in the darkness at your side
Dream, baby, and put your hand in mine
Under the moon, in shadows
I exist
Real and true, even if only
A wish
I close my eyes and dream
Of this
A hand to hold, a soul
To kiss
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by TheRaven on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 12:53:06 AM AEST (User
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Amazing. Simply touching and awesome. Great job, I love the way you slip in the rhymes, but not noticeably. Good write thanks for sharing.
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by Spike on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 02:21:11 AM AEST (User
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SSSmoking!! sensuous and beautiful, full of aching longings as well as the promise of dreams and desires fullfulled if the committment is there.
I really liked the collars and cuffs touches here, particularly the lovely verse at the end. It repeats itself in the mind so easily. Well constructed, and a beautiful theme,
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 06:17:51 AM AEST (User
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an amazing and beautfiul write,
pixie xx |
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 06:49:45 AM AEST (User
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Oh My God!
This is just wonderful!
The flow and rhythem are beautiful, but the content!
On the surface it's wistfull and even sensual,
Underneath the words there are avenues upon avenues... hopes, dreams, wishes, possibilities!
I love this! I find the the whole idea extemely appealing! |
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 10:24:43 AM AEST (User
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SNM, I have to ditto everything Jecks said. He took my comment!! I know all these feelings and the eternal hope and dream. This is an amazing write.
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by theMoth on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 03:02:18 PM AEST (User
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i found this very spiritual rather than simply emotional. Nice work. Also I love it when someone else uses the word "baby" besides me. --Mothy |
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by pvd on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 07:57:32 PM AEST (User
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This is great!! A mix of romance, mystical and spiritual emotion, sensuality, a touch of the lyrical and the inadvertant rhyme all blend together. KUDOS!!!
A well written Poem with a capital P.
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by Trippychick on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 10:12:11 AM AEST (User
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I really like this one sis, especially the last verse. Someone else commented that it sticks in your mind, and it does.
Really great write! |
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 03:56:29 PM AEST (User
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Touching. Once again, I find such power in your endings. Well done.
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 10:48:26 PM AEST (User
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Okay, I won't ask. ;-)
But gosh, this poem is so beautiful in what seems every way. Soft, gentle, flowing, sensual
...the dreams...the wishes. Yes, beautiful.
*reads it again*
Timbo
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Re: Dreaming in Shadows
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 10:52:01 PM AEST (User
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*remembering something else*
You are a true poet.
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