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What I See In The Future
Contributed by
intelectualPoet
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Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 05:24:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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What I See In The Future
The months have begin to roll,
And You have come to a decision,
A decision that has absolutly taken the last,
The last breath out of my broken body.
You found the right one,
When all along I thought it was me,
But instead it's him,
Your knight in shining armour,
And I'm not even your joker.
I knew this was going to happen,
But I choose not to admit it.
I cried,
For what seemed like an eternity,
While we discused it 'hypothetically'
The thought alone rips me apart.
When it became a reality,
It was like putting the gun in my mouth,
And my love for you,
Pulled the trigger.
But I didn't die,
Instead I lied there,
Motionlessly, emotionally,
Torn and tattered...
I love you,
Even though you no longer love me...
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Re: What I See In The Future
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by deathdrop on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 05:54:27 PM AEST
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wow! as far as your poetry goes you're excellent at it.
but try to not think for the worse. all the rotting thoughts and pain will more than liekl amn you up inside and then if it does happen then it will be more unbareble...
just tink about it... is it worth it? |
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Re: What I See In The Future
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 05:58:04 PM AEST
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Instead I lied there,
Motionlessly, emotionally,
Torn and tattered...
Heartwrenching. There's an awful lot in those few words. You trapped it (the pain) in this write. Any one that has known heartbreak will be left aching for having read this. Powerful.
One who hates hypothetical conversations,
SNM |
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Re: What I See In The Future
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by AspenGlow on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 06:36:06 PM AEST
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Excellent write of how one feels....the other side of choice.
thank you for sharing. |
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Re: What I See In The Future
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by critterhideaway on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 05:49:44 AM AEST
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| Very good write. Too bad sometimes we can't let love die as easily as it sometimes starts |
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Re: What I See In The Future
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by critterhideaway on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 05:50:30 AM AEST
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| Very good write. Too bad sometimes we can't let love die as easily as it sometimes starts |
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Re: What I See In The Future
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 03:25:15 PM AEST
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| I know how you feel but i hope you do not give up love will happen again |
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