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To Bad It Was Just A Dream
Contributed by
WestCPunk
on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 02:40:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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A locked door
A lifeless body on the floor
An empty pill bottle
Something so simple
She hated herself in every way
Went through the same routine every single day
Always beatened
And bruised
Yelling
Screaming
Always fighting
Dreams dashed
Feelings thrashed
This girl was in a neverending battle
And now it's time for her funeral
She didn't wanna wait for things to get better
She didn't wanna be a part of the future
She won't deny that some of her memories were worthwhile
But her friends just couldn't seem to see passed her fake smile
She used to be so vivid
If only it all could have been prevented
A broken child
With broken wings
Living in a broken home
...This girl sounds like me
.................To bad it was just a dream
Copyright ©
WestCPunk
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2004-08-25 14:40:55]
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Re: To Bad It Was Just A Dream
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by yellow_sundragon on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 03:59:22 PM AEST
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This style comes very natural for you, I can tell because it doesn't feel forced...
A very good poem.. I like it... and I've had them dreams that make you wake up and curse the gods for waking up... oblivion would be so much easier....
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Re: To Bad It Was Just A Dream
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 06:42:03 PM AEST
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Sure, don't challenge yourself. Stay where it is safe and comfortable. Let's see how far that takes you in life. I expected more than that from you, for some reason.
It is an o.k. poem.
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: To Bad It Was Just A Dream
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by WestCPunk on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 07:28:24 PM AEST
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ha ha ya ya ya
just because i write this way doesn't mean what you think it does rita it's what i'm good at and no one should judge me for that.....i'm certainly not afraid of a challenge i'm just better at writing this way and it lets me express the way i feel then actually going ahead and doing all of it and think expresing it is a lot better than actually doing it.... |
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Re: To Bad It Was Just A Dream
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 08:15:46 PM AEST
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| i loved your write. =] |
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Re: To Bad It Was Just A Dream
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by CrimsonTears on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 11:23:46 PM AEST
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I liked this alot...great write
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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