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I'm Drowning
Contributed by
pyrofungus
on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 01:25:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I’m shutting down
I’m weaker than before
My eyes want to close
The urge to hurt myself went away
The feeling shot through my arms once again
My eyes start to open a little wider than before
The “feeling”
It’s back
Through my whole body
It now runs
My eyes became watery
Yet did not spill
They were stuck inside of me
Letting me drown with the negatives
Not sending me any sort of lifesaver
I slowly began to sink
In this impure blood from within
That cannot and will not bleed out
To make it more shallow
So I can stand
And stop sinking
For I cannot swim.
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pyrofungus
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 01:51:31 PM AEST
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you can swim, just cling onto the side of the pool for abit, take some deep breathes and take it easy, .. I wrote a poem like this awhile back, I think it was called Fear Of Drowning... very emotional write,
pixie xx |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by afterdark on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 02:06:51 PM AEST
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i agree with pixie its a very good poem..The depth is nice..
AfterDark.. |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 09:29:16 PM AEST
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| amazing write. i also agree with pixie. |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by a_bear on
Thursday, 26th August 2004 @ 09:55:29 AM AEST
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| The feeling is too horrible to contemplate...great poem you make me feel what you feel! (mary) |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by deathdrop on
Thursday, 26th August 2004 @ 05:47:38 PM AEST
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oh such dark feelings...!
yet so strange how we're a like. |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th August 2004 @ 07:23:53 PM AEST
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| I really like this one,i can relate to your feeling in this poem.Very good. |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th August 2004 @ 07:24:14 PM AEST
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| I really like this one,i can relate to your feeling in this poem.Very good. |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th August 2004 @ 07:24:40 PM AEST
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| I really like this one,i can relate to your feeling in this poem.Very good. |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by Twitch06 on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 09:30:10 PM AEST
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very great rite! i really enjoyed it
~Kristen |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by AdamChantell on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 01:17:51 AM AEST
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| i too want to "drown" sometimes. great write |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by corrupted_minds on
Saturday, 4th September 2004 @ 03:37:10 PM AEST
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Deep write, I understand.
Love always
Corrupted_minds |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by matts_sweetie_04 on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 06:07:59 PM AEST
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| Very good write. You expressed your emotions well. Keep up the good work and hang in there! |
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Re: I'm Drowning
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by Sirena_Degana on
Tuesday, 14th September 2004 @ 08:02:50 PM AEST
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this poem has awesome...what's the word...when you describe something that sounds like what its supposed to sound like but it has a totally different meaning... like an intuwindow or something like that..i'm not sure,..this poem is great..many people can't relate to this i know..well obviously they can or u wouldn't have 12 comments saying almost the same thing..BUT IT'S STILL WICKED AWESOME...
blessed be
sirena
p.s. thx for commenting on my poem... |
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