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Couldn't Hold On
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 08:53:17 PM in AEST
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EmotionalPoetry
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Couldn't Hold On
In life you only fade
No point to ever stay
It'll all be taken away
When you die some day
The screams of silence
Trying to be defiant
Holding on while you try
To live your life
No matter how hard you try
You'll fall every time
You never saw the light
You could never find
A reason to live life
You're lost on sight
Trying to remember a time
When you were wanted
And not pushed to the side
When you weren't rejected
For who you were inside
You can no longer handle life
Couldn't hold on
No matter how hard you tried
Couldn't hold on
You fell for the last time
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Re: Couldn't Hold On
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by holderofthestone on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 09:09:58 PM AEST
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"Trying to remember a time
When you were wanted" these lines are what im feeling right now. i really like this poem, you have a smooth flow with such sweet sadness.... I really like! great work as usuall. A++++
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Re: Couldn't Hold On
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by TheVoice on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 09:38:38 PM AEST
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My Dear,
Such a sad, heart touching write. Even when you do not have the power to hold on for yourself, There is ALWAYS someone else holding on to you to keep you from falling. Feel that persons gentle, yet secure grip.
Hugs,
The Voice
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Re: Couldn't Hold On
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by sheri on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 02:23:49 AM AEST
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| This poem really makes my heart and my mind think. It is an amazing piece of wriiting. |
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Re: Couldn't Hold On
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by WestCPunk on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 02:50:12 PM AEST
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This says a lot to me because it's exactly how i feel most of the time it's amazing when you can't come up with the words to explain how you're feeling and then you come on this site and someone is able to do it for you! Good job!
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Re: Couldn't Hold On
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by savedbydeath on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 02:53:08 PM AEST
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yo J wonderful write sometimes i feel like i fall all the time 2 but i always get back up,this was so emotional made me shed a tear
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Re: Couldn't Hold On
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by PsykoticDoll on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 09:53:32 PM AEST
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| Very beautiful. You bring the reader to where you are when you wrote it and those are the best poems of all. Great work! |
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Re: Couldn't Hold On
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by PsykoticDoll on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 09:53:33 PM AEST
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| Very beautiful. You bring the reader to where you are when you wrote it and those are the best poems of all. Great work! |
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