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Taffy and Wax Paper
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 12:15:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I am like taffy
But still you pulled away
With bits of me
Stuck to you
(So many bits that day)
You, became wax paper
Had to, you’d later say
Picking the pieces
Off of you
(So I would go away)
Little by little
You threw me away
‘Til you were nearly
Cleansed of me
(‘Cept the bit that’s there to stay)
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2004-08-23 00:15:48]
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by Orlando on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 12:36:07 AM AEST
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| Short and sweet could not have summed it up better. Especially the "sweet"! Honestly though, very light-hearted and witty! |
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by artostuff on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 04:17:07 AM AEST
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| wonderful poem. i like the analogy of taffy. |
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by pixie on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 05:41:59 AM AEST
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wow, an amazing write, very sad, but well expressed
pixie xx |
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by Kie on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 08:56:20 AM AEST
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A very unique perspective. Great mind you obviously possess.
I loved it and I think I could definitely relate. I guess we all can at least once in our lives. Right?
Well done again..
Kie |
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by Baronhawk on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 09:00:22 AM AEST
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I love toffee...especially the way they stick to the mouth in between chews.... such sweet candy too. (I guess toffee is the same as taffy??
But for me toffee/taffy comes in a jar with no wax paper...hmmm mayhaps different types of toffee/taffy. Though I do know that some toffee/taffy are wrapped in wax paper or plastic wrapper.
Oh well...
Seriously... you seem to be taking this let down pretty well... the separation from your wax paper..taffy...
or such is the impression of the persona of tafy in this here write. Kinda like gum that has been chewed and savored only to be spitted out or stucked behind forum postings on the walls.
Anyway..
A very quaint and rustic poetry that doth have brought to mind a delectable sigh from a cute little story. |
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 10:32:36 AM AEST
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I liked this - it reads simply, but is yet full of meaning. Very clever metaphor.
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 07:58:14 PM AEST
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So what happens when taffy meets taffy??? hmmmmmm
I've always said your writes are clever. This is no exception! |
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by pvd on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 09:14:22 AM AEST
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You are on a roll. I guess dentists love you too. Everybody has said what I was to say.
But, will not shed any salt water. Very cute and suger coated. A real confection of a poem.
PVD |
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by theMoth on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 03:04:53 PM AEST
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| I wish I could write stuff like this which is at once simple but very cool, I mean taffy and wax paper, it's not Paradise Lost, but you do your thang very well.--Mothy |
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by Spike on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 01:43:02 AM AEST
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I like your treatment of the idea that we never separate cleanly, that we are still sloughing off memories, feelings and physical reminders of those we separate from or leave us. Also the idea that the process is a traumatic one for the person who is left . Good stuff.
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd May 2006 @ 11:09:57 PM AEST
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Again loving your use of analogies.
And yes, relating as well as I have had that feeling of being thrown away.
Short, sweet, and sad.
Another awesome poem from SNM. :-)
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Re: Taffy and Wax Paper
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by poeticjestix on
Tuesday, 21st December 2010 @ 03:16:40 AM AEST
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| nice rhythm |
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