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Death Crawls
Contributed by
TwEeK
on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 03:35:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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see it glisten
dipped with dew drops aglow
it seems to sparkle in the sunlight
but not all is well about this web of magic
it is a place of considered death awaits
poor forbidding creatures caught in its power
the maiden of darkness herself awaits them
just waiting for them to be blindly captured
this o so beautiful web of inhanced beauty
when the dullwitted prey are so silently caught
with in deaths claw like grasp
all they can do is struggle and pray to be set free
but not when black death is closeing in on them
then there is no hope
but for a peacefull death
death will puncher theyre skin
then drink thier vary essance
like a daytime vampire seaching for its next victim
then lady death crawls back and shrinks into the shadows
Copyright ©
TwEeK
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2004-08-22 15:35:51] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Death Crawls
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 04:50:35 PM AEST (User
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I like the visuals, although I hope the mods get around to sorting your spelling out.
You opened well, and gave this piece a sense of normalcy to which you upturned well.
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Re: Death Crawls
(User Rating: 1 ) by CrimsonTears on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 05:11:28 PM AEST (User
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i really liked this...dark and creepy...awesome write....excellent job
Lots of Love
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Re: Death Crawls
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kindredblood_dragon on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 09:23:29 PM AEST (User
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An intense write, I'll admit Im not over keen on spiders, oh not that id kill em, just not keen, but they have their uses, at least my room is bug free lol.
Very discriptive and graphic awesome poem.
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Re: Death Crawls
(User Rating: 1 ) by flamingblade on
Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 03:57:22 PM AEST (User
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deep, kinda disturbing, but thats what i like so...
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