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forlorn
Contributed by
Dizza_13
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Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 04:04:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
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A saw you just the other day,
What did you want to say,
You were playing me back then,
I think your playing me again,
You say that no ones to blame,
Now isn’t that a shame,
I gave you a second chance,
You ruined that without a second glance.
I gave my love to you that day,
All you did was lead me astray,
I gave myself to you,
All you did was make me blue,
I gave you my heart,
All you did was tear it apart.
I tried to love you once back then,
I tried to love you once again,
You were my one and my all,
You said you’d be there when I fall,
But now the walls around me crumble,
And you’re not here to catch me when I stumble,
When you fell I was always there,
I showed you so many times that I cared.
All that I had now has departed,
Nothing good that I’ve ever had has lasted,
I now turn back to the knife,
To take this scarred and worn life,
I cut thin and then cut deep,
To free myself of the things I don’t want to keep,
All the things around me fade,
My last thought of the blade.
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Re: forlorn
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by artostuff on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 05:12:04 AM AEST
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I like this one. It really reaches me as i feel a similar way about someone i thought was close to me. I wrote something you might appreciate, its lame not as grand as yours,
shards of torns charge
through my mind, wounds
never healing, never forgotten,
friends as these who needs
nightmares. |
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Re: forlorn
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by Archie on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 06:19:46 AM AEST
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| What saddness and betrayal in your words! I feel like this sometimes. I hope you feel better. |
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Re: forlorn
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 08:39:25 AM AEST
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I know how you feel,
Your discription of it was very vivid, and I liked the way you ryhmed each detail, Awesome write, execellent poem.
Keep it up.
Take care always
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Re: forlorn
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by CrimsonTears on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 01:36:49 PM AEST
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I can relate to this soo well....great job expressing it....awesome write...i love it!
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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