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Red Reminder
Contributed by
carebear
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Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 01:23:12 PM in AEST
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Holding her breath,
She pulls back her sleeve,
Pink lines forgotten remind her,
Of what she use to be,
Her past dark, unsteady
Trouble was never far behind,
Opening anger, faults, sorrow
Giving up was her way of thinking,
Drinking away pain, life, guilt
Falling down in her darkest hour,
Red droplets fall, glass shattered
Tears shed draining her weak
Losing control, balance, sleep
She simply threw it all away,
Painting her world black,
Will she ever find her way back?
Screaming out loud blocking out,
The voice's inside her head,
Memory’s set her skin on fire,
Her soul spread upon the soaking red sheet,
Lies told with deceit,
Looking down at her red reminder.
© C.S "04"
Copyright ©
carebear
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2004-08-21 13:23:12]
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Re: Red Reminder
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by deathdrop on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 01:27:43 PM AEST
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it holds a nicely thought up tiltle and the your is awesome too.
i'd like to read more of your work so keep them comming! |
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Re: Red Reminder
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by pixie on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 01:30:05 PM AEST
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a very pained write, filled with raw emotion, good expression, your words hit a chord with me,
pixie xx |
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Re: Red Reminder
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 02:11:01 PM AEST
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| great write and emotion. |
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Re: Red Reminder
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by PoeticMystery on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 02:14:08 PM AEST
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| wow-very emotional poem. This was great! |
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Re: Red Reminder
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by cauchy3 on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 02:39:28 PM AEST
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wine-coloring flirt my white
slleves are wite my floating are right
grapes are red
lives are read
Bloods are writing
History still cool in wire
Tricks are threads in boxes
Lands are our boons
Laws are list in book
They are hard to heard
We are hearts to hearts
But wars are harsh |
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Re: Red Reminder
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by CrimsonTears on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 07:05:03 PM AEST
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great poem..one that i can relate to...awesome job
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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Re: Red Reminder
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by Jason_Robert_Britt on
Wednesday, 4th February 2009 @ 04:57:04 AM AEST
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| I wish I could take your pain and experiances into the void that is me.... missing my carebear =( |
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