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Chicago, you lazy bum
Contributed by
Ina
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Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 12:08:39 PM in AEST
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I am back Chicago!
But you,
you haven’t moved an inch,
you just sat here looking like THAT while I was gone?
Silly me, of course you never do anything worth while
you just drift through history, poetry, and cabaret songs,
without making any significant contributions.
Well, Chicago, I kayaked through the River Styx,
and slept on wigs of hay
and you?
My GOD you are pale!
I feel like I don’t know you anymore,
with your odd dialect and obnoxious personality.
You should have seen me Chicago,
I had this spiritual quest
(which you would never let me take!)
and found cities can be beautiful,
not like you
you foul flushed out couch potato.
Copyright ©
Ina
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2004-08-21 12:08:39]
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Re: Chicago, you lazy bum
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by Puppy on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 12:44:44 PM AEST
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I really enjoyed your peom great write
Puppy :) |
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Re: Chicago, you lazy bum
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by reilt on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 01:45:16 PM AEST
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| i really liked this ina...perfectly unique as always...just perfect |
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Re: Chicago, you lazy bum
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 03:48:35 PM AEST
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I like this! Very unique... form title to fabulous last line. You've drawn me in... I think I need to read more of you work!
Well done,
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Re: Chicago, you lazy bum
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by zenmind on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 02:24:16 PM AEST
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I felt like this is a poem I'd read in a book. It feels proffesional if that means anything. Precisely said. You expressed alot, years of experience in Chicago, in a very short space, and that is what I mean by professional. But I'm not a critiqe (sp?) Reminds me of a beat poem.
you foul flushed out couch potato
lol....well said.
Be true,
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