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the wait
Contributed by
darkeyedman
on
Saturday, 2nd November 2002 @ 02:45:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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The day I went to sea we were standing by the dock, and she was holding me, holding me. Wouldn't let me go.
She tried to hide her fear as she watched him sail away.
Took comfort in the other wives, the things they had to say.
"The first time out is filled with doubt, but always works out fine."
Hope is for the return, sorrow is for goodbyes,
and all between is time.
The storm crashed into us, rolled over us, cast us up to the sky and back.
Brought blackness to our eyes, crushed our wills to splinters.
She sat upon an outcrop, searching for a sail.
He promised he'd return, promised without fail.
The last light of day helped her find her way down the rocky climb.
Hope was the morning sun, sorrow the darkened trail,
and all between is time.
I slid down the pitching deck, still standing upright when I hit the water.
The cold grabbed me, held me. I drown in thoughts of you.
Do not worry my love, this did not hurt.
Death is as gentle as the breeze on your skirt.
Soft as the kisses I miss so sublime.
Hope is the other side, sorrow the tear she cries,
and all between is time.
I watch her from the clouds, from bellow the icy depths.
Hold her hand as she sleeps, and smile when she awakes.
She sat in her rocker reading, and glancing at the sea.
One eye on her poetry, one eye looks for me.
We'll meet in death she said under her breath and returned to her book of rhyme.
Hope is for the reunion, sorrow is for the wait,
and all between is time.
Copyright ©
darkeyedman
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Re: the wait
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by OreO on
Saturday, 2nd November 2002 @ 02:52:34 PM AEST
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This is beautiful
and so sad
Great write
Keep em' coming
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Re: the wait
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by MisterRight on
Saturday, 2nd November 2002 @ 03:46:17 PM AEST
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Wow! I'm impressed! This is an amazing write, I'm so glad I caught it.
My favorite line:
"Hope is for the reunion, sorrow is for the wait, and all between is time."
Beautiful!
Curtis |
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Re: the wait
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by DreamWeaver on
Sunday, 3rd November 2002 @ 01:34:37 PM AEST
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| This is a great poem ... I loved the way you had two different messages going at the one time. Well written. |
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Re: the wait
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 5th November 2002 @ 05:24:33 AM AEST
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Excellent poem, Dark... Very well written.. I also love the last 2 lines.....
Jenni |
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Re: the wait
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by POETRY_AND_LOVE_BUG on
Saturday, 7th December 2002 @ 08:35:58 PM AEST
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~very great poem
you got a great talent for it
keep them comin!!!!!!!!!!!~
~ britteny~ |
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Re: the wait
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by MoonLite on
Thursday, 12th December 2002 @ 07:54:41 PM AEST
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| What a sad story.. |
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Re: the wait
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by kengie on
Thursday, 19th December 2002 @ 09:42:44 AM AEST
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| Great poem!..Sure does bring a tear...1940's vintage don't you think... |
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by georgelynyrd920 on
Monday, 6th January 2003 @ 06:45:10 PM AEST
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| That was very good, its so sad. I really enjoyed it, thanks!! |
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by Wrybod on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 06:42:48 AM AEST
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I hope, oh how I hope, since I read your poem
thank you so much. Life without hope is no life at all |
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Re: the wait
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by lastwaltz on
Wednesday, 26th March 2003 @ 06:24:49 PM AEST
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| I really, really love the words "all between is time" and the way you've repeated them throughout. My favorite is the line "hope is for the return...." Very moving |
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by CarrieLynn on
Saturday, 31st May 2003 @ 04:37:43 PM AEST
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Wow!....... your poem made my stomache sink and my throat knot up....My boyfriend just left again to go back over seas. He is in the Navy...... I was just lookin through the top 30 poems, and yours is one of the ones most read..... It doesnt surprise me.... This was a beautiful poem and it really hit home for me....It scared me more than anything though.... But it is all the same because it was very very good writting,....... Thanks
CarrieLynn age: 17
P.S. I would love for you to read my poems if you would..... Please and Thanks |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th June 2003 @ 09:06:13 AM AEST
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| wow that was so amazing, my throat is all choky and my stomach is leaping everywhere. that was an amazing write i never expected what was going to happen, great work |
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by stargazer on
Tuesday, 15th July 2003 @ 08:36:18 AM AEST
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This poem brought tears to my eyes. I am left speechless... I do not know what to say other than that was wonderful!
-Amy |
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by PixiePuff on
Thursday, 24th July 2003 @ 11:27:33 PM AEST
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| beautifully written, i love the imagery. |
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by MnMnMsrcool on
Friday, 10th October 2003 @ 10:40:22 AM AEST
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| wow that was such a good poem. Really sad but so good. I really like the last two lines they're really good...good poem and keep writing |
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by harshreality on
Monday, 17th November 2003 @ 10:28:27 PM AEST
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| this brought tears to my eyes. Its perhaps the best love poem I've ever read. |
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by GoodGirl on
Monday, 1st December 2003 @ 10:12:36 PM AEST
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| I really enjoyed this poem. It was very well written and you certainly deserve all the praise that you are getting. Keep writing. |
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Re: the wait
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by apollo on
Monday, 8th December 2003 @ 12:27:22 PM AEST
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| very well thought out poem, really enjoyed the way it made you think about life, and your loved ones. keep posting, that was amazing. |
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by monica109 on
Wednesday, 28th January 2004 @ 01:53:34 AM AEST
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| An old messae with an new spin equal yipee |
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Re: the wait
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by Rawkergurl2003 on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 06:28:40 PM AEST
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wow... that about sums it up...sad story.. makes my eyes sweat. but its nevertheless a great poem. aparently its not one of your only great ones..keep it up.
cyndi |
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by Rawkergurl2003 on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2004 @ 06:28:51 PM AEST
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wow... that about sums it up...sad story.. makes my eyes sweat. but its nevertheless a great poem. aparently its not one of your only great ones..keep it up.
cyndi |
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Re: the wait
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by intelectualpoet on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 08:30:04 PM AEST
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Here Here, well done my friend. I have been lucky and read 2 outstanding entries today. Thank you for showing this to us, It was marvalous....
May your life bring you peace and happiness
Mac |
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by ammalu on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 06:16:25 AM AEST
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| great write & good theme too. infact every ' waiting' backed by sorrows and followed by a hope- congrts. for the nice piece. |
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by reprobate on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 09:05:46 PM AEST
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with a ring of sad truth, excellent piece.
thanks for sharing |
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by wray on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 07:30:36 AM AEST
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| Like what everyone said... that catch phrase about hope/sorrow/time really got me. Nicely written. |
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Re: the wait
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by PumpkinPie on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 10:52:08 PM AEST
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Wow what a strong poem you wrote there.You sure got me having one heck of a heartache,I'm living a difficult moment right now and it hit home..Excellent last verse,
PumpkinPie |
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by babygirl2004 on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 04:09:31 PM AEST
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| this poem gave me chills because the one thing i want is a love like that very good |
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by buchi on
Thursday, 8th July 2004 @ 01:51:51 PM AEST
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| Good to the last line...sorrow is for the wait...all between is time...oh yes father time the merciful!!...liked it |
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by Solnubis on
Thursday, 29th July 2004 @ 01:09:06 PM AEST
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| Beautifully written, could actually visualize this woman. Very descriptive and detailed. Is this a true event in your life? |
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by PumpkinPie on
Thursday, 29th July 2004 @ 03:31:06 PM AEST
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Beautiful powerful write,I loved the flow of this piece,the way it was structured.
PumpkinPie |
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by diba_perfect on
Saturday, 12th April 2008 @ 05:58:00 PM AEST
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wow..haven't really read a better poem in quite a long time.."Hope is for the return, sorrow is for goodbyes,
and all between is time" line is absolutely fascinating.. |
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