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One last slit
Contributed by
Miss_erika
on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 03:13:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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She catches her tears
in a little glass jar
that she keeps hidden beneath the floorboards.
she lays inside the burnt circle
and wishes her pain no more.
she cuts once
for being taunted
she cuts twice
for being neglected
she cuts and cuts and cuts some more
untill theres a puddle on her floor.
she whipes it up with her hands
and writes her name and the date
in her blood on the wall
she smiles and says,
this is it,
one more slit,
and it ends it all.
Copyright ©
Miss_erika
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2004-08-21 03:13:57]
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Re: One last slit
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by Dizza_13 on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 03:29:36 AM AEST
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chilling, made me feel like i was there in the room.
Great work
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Re: One last slit
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by deathdrop on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 03:39:59 AM AEST
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oooo... it's rather spooky.
nice one!
i love the idea you've used in this poem.
you've made an excellent job! |
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Re: One last slit
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by garyh on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 03:47:57 AM AEST
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| I loved the second stanza. The first seems a little shaky.. but then gets much better. Thank ya |
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Re: One last slit
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by CrimsonTears on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 07:00:19 PM AEST
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great write....excellent job
Lots of Love
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