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The Song
Contributed by
Miss_erika
on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 03:03:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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memories dance around
to a tune inside my head
it has a certain sound
but it cant really be described
theres not much to be said.
but the words, you see
is a reminder
of how we used to be
and now that you have her
there is no more we.
this songs about a heartbrake
and how its not going to get built up inside
and how thers no more emotions to fake
and no more emotions to hide.
so when i see you with her
not noticing how u made my life go wrong
i'll just sit there alone
and listen to the song.
Copyright ©
Miss_erika
... [
2004-08-21 03:03:59]
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Re: The Song
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by garyh on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 03:54:04 AM AEST
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| Yeah.. the flow seems a tad off. But it does have lots of feeling in it which is great... |
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Re: The Song
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by Archie on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 07:56:17 AM AEST
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| This is not that bad. Work a bit on you a bit on the rhyming parts and it will be better. |
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Re: The Song
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 02:21:22 AM AEST
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| i am not to worried about the flow so much as the meaning, which is positive. i like that you don't have to hide emotioms anymore. i hope all is well with you. |
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