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Guilt Walks
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 12:53:19 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Guilt walks a lonesome spiral of a road
of which the end seems to be nowhere in sight.
Time and time again, the old ghosts
you thought you had vanquished out of mind
Return to spite you to your death.
Oh, it feels your demise would bring more
peace than having to bear on your neck
The constant crushing breathing of a
betrayal impaled for good.
You try so hard to ask yourself:
Will it ever fade away?
When unseen hands silently cast back your sins at you
And air drips in steady streams of familiar
faces that never cease to haunt you
When all you seem to live in is a glasshouse of regret
And the outside is a place we took too long to reach
When the stars piloting the skies seem too
bright for your carmine-covered eyes
When bitter laughs devour your eyes like
venom steam wafting into an infant's nose
And blind your senses into loveless liquid puddles
When the reflecting pools you thought you could deceive
Deny you the illusions you feed on to stay sane
That's when the truth melts into you;
That's when the mask dissolves before your eyes;
That's when the bitter truth resounds:
It never, never fades away.
For guilt
always
walks.
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by venkat on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 03:46:22 AM AEST
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"When bitter laughs devour your eyes like
venom steam wafting into an infant's nose
And blind your senses into loveless liquid puddles"..very dark..awesome and very poetic write..venkat
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by deathdrop on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 04:00:00 AM AEST
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i agree with you very much so.
you have selected some brilliant words to explain your poem too.
5/5! |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by thumper on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 06:24:49 AM AEST
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You described guilt very aptly."The constant crushing breathing of a betrayal impaled for good." I like that. Nice work. Kudos!
Thumps ; 0) |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by lizabeth283 on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 10:10:25 AM AEST
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| excellent poem! i can definently relate to this poem- in fact i just wrote my own poem on guilt- though your definently more of a expert poet than me :p anywho...very good description! |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by Baronhawk on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 11:54:47 AM AEST
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Guilt...curses for memories...we remember always these guilts that as you say walks with us. I can feel the truth of these here your words for I too carry some guilt with me....
A very vivid description herein your poem of that feel of guilt... I can see it clearly...the guilts that is one of the reasons why I cannot sleep at night.
Vivid and poweful write! |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by blueheart on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 02:40:21 AM AEST
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| Amazing words that speak so much. |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by arden on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 10:38:03 PM AEST
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as others have said, this was amazing. a very deep poem. i really enjoyed this one.
greatly penned Avarice.
5 stars
Arden |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by Hurretje on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 03:24:01 AM AEST
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Walks and crawls around like Gollem in your own personal Mordor....
This work is really ...precioussss... to me!
Hugs,
Hur |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 18th September 2004 @ 12:13:50 PM AEST
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Wow!!!
This is amazing!
So many images. And so many things I could relate to.
This is a great write, my friend.
Much love,
Phil xxx |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by emystar on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 08:42:26 PM AEST
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I think forgiveness of oneself is one of the hardest things to conquer.
Great writing.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 04:21:12 AM AEST
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| Such pain yet so much beauty in your words. Awesome write!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by Ronald on
Sunday, 10th October 2004 @ 04:58:00 AM AEST
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| This is so so so true. Guilt... You chose a really great theme to talk about. That's good and I like it! Thanks so much. You are a wonderful writer and a prolific one too! |
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Re: Guilt Walks
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by Spike on
Wednesday, 20th September 2006 @ 06:53:40 AM AEST
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Stellar images, resounding message and serpentine language weave the most effective mood. I wish I could say it wasn't true, but guilt burrows deep and flowers regularly.
S |
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