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If Only
Contributed by
eatfresh22
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Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 07:10:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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The Land of If Only
Where I often go to
A paradise, a place
There I always find you.
If only you were here
To hold me in your arms,
To lift me in the air,
To melt me with your charms.
I miss you so much,
But the sound of your voice
Brings your face to mind
And my heart does rejoice.
The Land of If Only
Is only for dreams
If it were reality
Less great it would seem.
So dream I must
And dream I will,
To fly and soar
In love's great thrill.
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Re: If Only
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by ps_ihateyou on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 10:05:34 PM AEST
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| i really liked this. great write. |
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Re: If Only
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by Wachumiri on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 05:06:18 PM AEST
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One of my favorites. I really like the thought process that brought this one about.
Take care, my Love.
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Re: If Only
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 05:24:36 PM AEST
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I like the use of the term as a place, and it works well. I think that sometimes dreams can be better than the 'real thing', if only (only if) the real thing is fraught with pain and anguish.
Good write.
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Re: If Only
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 06:47:24 PM AEST
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Ah, David would appreciate the thought process that brought this about.
Very nice job. The last stanza kind of changed rhythm though. Not that that is a crime.
Most of the time.
Foscathà
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Re: If Only
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by faith_my_eyes on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 01:14:16 PM AEST
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| cute. |
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