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Chasms of Cliche
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
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Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 02:10:20 AM in AEST
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there will never be a way
to weave words, my words,
into symphonies of sounds
that twine and thread together
and tell all the petty things
I never dared to say
it's all been said and done before
in black and white-- they beg for more
I'll slip away, within cliche
the story's just the same.
(don't let me cry)
and, no matter how many times
it eases down too fast, too fast,
a tear is merely saline
watery-thin essence,
just a blot on the paper
and it will never be beautiful
it all has made the rounds before
it never stops, they all want more
I'll hide and drown in quaint cliche
the story's just the same.
(don't let me cry)
and even if I try and try
I'll never find a poem in today
never find a shimmer
in those words I'll never say
so let me drown in chasms of cliche
let me lose myself and laugh
'cause it's just the same as your yesterday
and you, it's just the same as your tomorrow
and it's your today, and yours
let me be generic,
don't let me be alone--
I'll speak my pain but in your voice
and not be on my own
(don't let me cry)
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ShadowDaughter
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Re: Chasms of Cliche
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by Bruce on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 02:19:30 AM AEST
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| please don't cry, its lovely, and very well written |
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Re: Chasms of Cliche
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by cauchy3 on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 04:59:27 AM AEST
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| How about Chasms in abysms |
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Re: Chasms of Cliche
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by MoonlitAngel on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 09:57:10 AM AEST
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Oh, Nora, this is gorgeous. Painfully beautiful. I'm not sure what to say here, to be honest. But I love this, I think you did a wonderful job.
~ Dee |
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Re: Chasms of Cliche
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 10:02:49 AM AEST
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Oh hunni, don't cry....
Sad poem, i'm here when you gotta talk
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Re: Chasms of Cliche
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 06:50:27 PM AEST
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You, dear Nora - could never be cliche. Anyone that thinks you are... just isn't listening as well as they should be. You needn't say anything about this piece. It speaks for itself. It speaks... in a lovely, moving, noncliche way.
Oh! I hate to keep arguing with you here... but... you probably knew I would. Of course, a tear can be (and is here) beautiful. Exactly as your poem (the one you couldn't find in today) is. I love everything about this... from structure, to flow, the essence and the emotion that seeps out of it. I read it aloud - but did so in a low, quiet voice... barely more than a whisper... because it's just that kind of piece. It left me aching. It is... amazing.
Knowing you could never really be generic,
SNM |
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Re: Chasms of Cliche
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by eatfresh22 on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 08:09:58 PM AEST
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Your writing certainly is unique, but I know what you mean....it seems like every word of beauty has already been said, and that now it's just a matter of what order you put these repetitive words into. You're doing a fine job of it, and encourage people like me. Cheer up...
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Re: Chasms of Cliche
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 05:26:56 PM AEST
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very good Nora indeed I liked the part about the tears the best although it was all good. I don't know why u want to be generic though since there's a lot to be said for individuality. In any case a very good poem *makes a mental note to read more of your poems*
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Re: Chasms of Cliche
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 10:00:38 PM AEST
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| I know what you mean by feeling as though everything that could have been said in poetic words, already has been. But believe me, your poems are far from cliche. You have a brilliant and wonderful gift, and its nothing like anyones I've ever seen. And the best part is, you're only 15!!!! Imagine 5, 10, 15 years from now! You're going to be great, I know it. (Even more so than you already are, though it seems hard to imagine. lol.) |
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