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Losing
Contributed by
Stellar
on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 01:29:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Holding on
Don't want to fall
Watching my world
Losing it all
I can't stay awake
Not one more day
But my dreams are cold
And the ends are frayed
The world is against me
Life goes by in a hurry
My breath grows fainter
As my vision gets blurry
So I'm holding on
Don't want to fall
Watching this world
Losing it all
Copyright ©
Stellar
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2004-08-19 01:29:45]
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Re: Losing
(User Rating: 1 )
by Willofree on
Thursday, 19th August 2004 @ 07:49:00 AM AEST
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Really speaks to a contemporary issue in a very succinct manner. I like the rhyming lines. One could really expand on that theme.
I liked the poem.
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Re: Losing
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by afterdark on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 06:18:56 PM AEST
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i like how you wrote this one..It really worked for me as well..Good job..
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