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All I Hear is Static
Contributed by
deadreckoning1983
on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 12:44:10 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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One single crimson tear,
Tears thru this thin,paper oxygen.
The dew covered grass becomes a mirror
Reflecting the horrible metamorphisis,
So it echoes into the night
On a cataclysmic frequency;
All I hear is static.
Your heart changed,
Like the waning of the moon.
The tide overran me,
I was swallowed up as I gasped for breath.
Don't let it die this way.
To hear your laugh,
While I struggle for love.
To see your smile,
Only when you are with him.
Copyright ©
deadreckoning1983
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2004-08-18 00:44:10]
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Re: All I Hear is Static
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 12:52:31 AM AEST
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Awww this is touching..written so lovely tho....
Jenni |
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Re: All I Hear is Static
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 09:50:41 PM AEST
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I loved this a very touching and sad piece I write the same stuff though...if you read later on my work...it has changed since then but anyways I liked this...loads of imagery also used in this...
keep it up...
much love,
Dani |
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Re: All I Hear is Static
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by EmoDCgirl36 on
Tuesday, 14th September 2004 @ 02:41:52 PM AEST
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| This is nice. |
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Re: All I Hear is Static
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 1st November 2014 @ 03:02:04 PM AEST
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Dear Poet,
Your colourful use of metaphor is tangible. The ending is especially tragic. I have to smirk a little at your inner Crab poking his head out in places. Wonderful.
~Scorp |
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