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Random Teen Slasher Whore Version 6.1
Contributed by
Ripper_Something_Unusual
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Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 05:52:10 PM in AEST
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Take the edge of this knife ,
Twist it around,
Whisper its secrets to your victims,
Take away the living life,
Of the ones you hunt,
Of the ones that made you what you are.
A sadistic grin on those perfect lips,
Makes it almost hard to say no,
But it gets so hard,
So I disregard my safety,
And I give you control.
Your a born ***** maniac,
I made you with a smile,
Born with a silver machete in your mouth,
This is my fault.
As you hang from the hanging tree,
The corpses all adore you,
Admiring your curves of least descent,
And when it all boils down to this,
Your baby starts to turn turn tricks,
And stomachs just to pay the rent.
This is my fault,
Blame me,
Didnt think you would love the taste so much,
This is my fault,
Blame me,
Didnt know you loved the blood so much.
Your secret desire is mine to perspire,
There is no reprise from this pit,
Shes perfect and broken,
Not kind or outspoken,
No suprise that shes a hit.
Ive said it before...
Its my fault.
Blame me....
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Ripper_Something_Unusual
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2004-08-17 17:52:10]
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Re: Random Teen Slasher Whore Version 6.1
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by 01_zanzebar on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 06:03:10 PM AEST
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hehe, great stuff again rippsy. good old criptic poetry as usual, i still dont fully understand it ( i guess so anyway) so hers what i think, its about a guy liking a lass for her psyical portracies and not knowing the crazy person inside and cos you enter her ideals, your as bad or worse than she is and the blood ends up spilling into the viens of the children. meh. i'll stick to my insane stuff for now
good stuff el bouyo
well done
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Re: Random Teen Slasher Whore Version 6.1
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by waos on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 07:00:58 PM AEST
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| i thought that was really good, i totally had to read it over a few times but it was awesome. nice work there. |
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Re: Random Teen Slasher Whore Version 6.1
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by Alina on
Tuesday, 17th August 2004 @ 10:21:12 PM AEST
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Truely BREATHTAKING and MAGNIFICENT!!! Keep up the good work. I wrote a poem somewhat similiar to this. Check it out. It is titled GLOWING and is about a shizophrenic boy who murders his mother. Just thoughts. Anywayz....... Awesome write. Great imagination and description. I almost felt like I could be the killer of this. FREAKY though.
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Re: Random Teen Slasher Whore Version 6.1
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 08:21:21 AM AEST
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Interesting. I like the ryhme schematic on the last but one verse.
Keep writing,. |
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Re: Random Teen Slasher Whore Version 6.1
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by Cancer on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 03:08:01 PM AEST
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wow. i'm glad your username sparked my interest. your work is original and enjoyable. i'm loving the themes i've seen so far. i'd list excerpts that struck me, but it was so powerful as a whole. ***** super.
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Re: Random Teen Slasher Whore Version 6.1
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 08:07:43 PM AEST
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Wow. Yes. Loved it. The images in my head
brought a disturbing smile to my head. I loved
the psychosis which was beautifully
described in this mad write. Great job...
Bobo (Joel) |
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